On Wed, 2018-07-18 at 12:51 -0700, Adam Williamson wrote: > On Wed, 2018-07-18 at 08:49 +0200, drago01 wrote: > > On Wednesday, July 18, 2018, Chris Murphy <lists@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > > > > On Tue, Jul 17, 2018 at 3:53 PM, Adam Williamson > > > <adamwill@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > > > On Tue, 2018-07-17 at 14:48 -0700, Adam Williamson wrote: > > > > > I instinctively like the non-split form here because, to me, it > > > > > emphasizes more clearly that "appropriately" applies to all three > > > > > actions. > > > > > > > > To be clearer here, consider these options: > > > > > > > > "...to appropriately install, remove and update..." > > > > "...to install, remove and update appropriately..." > > > > "...appropriately to install, remove and update..." > > > > > > > > To me, it's at least possible that someone might read the first as if > > > > the "appropriately" applies only to the action "install", and the > > > > second as if the "appropriately" applies only to the action "update". > > > > The third, however, can't really be understood in any way *other* than > > > > with "appropriately" applying to all three actions. > > > > > > Use a colon. > > > > > > to appropriately: install, remove, and update... > > > > > > Unambiguous. > > > > > > > Just drop "appropriately" and replace it with a footnote. Then there is no > > need for all of this discussion and the text is easier to read (also > > installing the correct update falls into common sense hence for most people > > it will be clear even without reading the footnote). > > There already is a footnote; to me the footnote reads better if it has > a word in the text to key off. > > To be honest I don't think anyone's actually pointed out any real > *problem* with the revised draft yet and I'm inclined to just go with > it, after a few more days for substantive feedback. I'm going ahead and implementing the proposal broadly as last drafted, I think there was sufficient agreement on the important parts of the proposal. If the precise wording gives us trouble in future, it can always be amended. Thanks, folks! -- Adam Williamson Fedora QA Community Monkey IRC: adamw | Twitter: AdamW_Fedora | XMPP: adamw AT happyassassin . net http://www.happyassassin.net _______________________________________________ desktop mailing list -- desktop@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to desktop-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Fedora Code of Conduct: https://getfedora.org/code-of-conduct.html List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines List Archives: https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/desktop@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx/message/VDZ6SQQANYNCZDN2Y7IGC7UGEYVP6UP2/