Hi Paul. Ok. The thing here is the article was written a year ago, and now could be very inaccurate because of several changes that happened since that. I'm currently "finishing" some bits of the project and if you want I could rewrite the article when this is done. I will take in account what you told about not explaining so much theory and go directly to the real thing. THanks On Thu, Nov 7, 2019 at 3:31 PM Paul Frields <stickster@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > I would also try to cut way back on the introductory "how it works" > material, and focus on how the user can get things done using Fleet > Commander. That will also limit the length of the articles in a way that > makes them more readable (and more likely to be read). > > Paul > > On Thu, Nov 7, 2019 at 8:31 AM Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> > wrote: > >> Hi there. >> >> I've modified the article with all the fantastic suggestions by Dale Raby. >> >> Also I've removed the duplicated content and converted the document to >> ODF, >> PDF and txt for people with slow computers or no google account. >> >> Thanks for all and regards. >> >> On Tue, Jun 26, 2018 at 10:45 AM Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> >> wrote: >> >> > Thank you very much Dale. I'm fixing the whole things you pointed. >> Almost >> > all of them make sense from the IT part. :) >> > >> > I will finish the modifications maybe today or tomorrown and I will >> change >> > the document to a text document so you can review it better :) >> > >> > Thanks for your help and your time! >> > >> > On Sat, Jun 23, 2018 at 4:53 AM Dale Raby <daleraby@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: >> > >> >> Just put in some suggestions. Your English is better than my Spanish >> but >> >> I found a few minor grammatical errors. >> >> >> >> The biggest problem I found was that there seems to be a large block of >> >> text that is a duplication. The section with the graphics is >> difficult for >> >> me to view with my slow connection here. >> >> >> >> Google documents are always difficult for me to edit. Google assumes >> >> that everyone has very fast connections and modern machines. I have >> >> neither. It put me into "suggestion mode", which is actually very >> clever >> >> of them... if only I had a fast connection! >> >> >> >> Bear in mind, that while I am a native speaker of English and have >> >> actually done quite a bit of writing, I am NOT an IT expert. So.... >> take >> >> any suggestions I give you with caution. I could be misunderstanding >> your >> >> intent. >> >> >> >> I will look at this again tomorrow when I am not half asleep. >> Neighbor's >> >> cattle (Herfords, two heifers, a calf and a 1,200 pound bull) got out >> onto >> >> the road this evening. I and former US Congressman Alan Lasee helped a >> >> police officer and the owner get them back into the enclosure. Was >> quite >> >> enough excitement for me! >> >> >> >> Dale >> >> >> >> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:14 PM, Oliver Gutierrez < >> ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> >> >> wrote: >> >> >> >>> Thank you very much Mr Raby! Just give me the time to separate it in >> >>> sections (so I will need to ad intros and outros for each block) and >> after >> >>> that I will need a review. >> >>> >> >>> In the meantime, I will give you the access you required :) >> >>> >> >>> You just need to access the document in this URL >> >>> >> >>> >> >>> >> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing >> >>> >> >>> Then Google will allow you to ask for document access and I will >> receive >> >>> a notification to give you the permissions. >> >>> >> >>> If you do that and you see I had not answered or allowed, please tell >> me >> >>> because maybe the notification is lost in my inbox. >> >>> >> >>> Again thanks. >> >>> >> >>> >> >>> P.D. Swear words in spanish are usually enough to be very >> communicative >> >>> of your current mood :P >> >>> >> >>> P.D. 2: After trying to send this email again, google asked me to give >> >>> automatic access to view the document to recipients, so maybe you >> will be >> >>> able to see it after receiving this. >> >>> >> >>> >> >>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:35 PM Dale Raby <daleraby@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: >> >>> >> >>>> Senor Gutierrez: >> >>>> >> >>>> I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any >> linguistic >> >>>> issues. I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is >> >>>> limited >> >>>> to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army >> days. >> >>>> >> >>>> I need permission to access your document though. >> >>>> >> >>>> Dale >> >>>> >> >>>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez < >> >>>> ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> >> >>>> wrote: >> >>>> >> >>>> > Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can >> >>>> separate >> >>>> > them into more "atomic" pieces :) >> >>>> > >> >>>> > Thanks for reviewing! >> >>>> > >> >>>> > >> >>>> > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields <stickster@xxxxxxxxx> >> >>>> wrote: >> >>>> > >> >>>> > > On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez < >> >>>> ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> >> >>>> > > wrote: >> >>>> > > > >> >>>> > > > Hi there. >> >>>> > > > >> >>>> > > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul >> >>>> for >> >>>> > > review. >> >>>> > > > >> >>>> > > > >> >>>> > > https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_ >> >>>> > Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing >> >>>> > > > >> >>>> > > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as >> >>>> English >> >>>> > is >> >>>> > > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most >> >>>> > welcome. >> >>>> > > >> >>>> > > Hi Oliver, >> >>>> > > >> >>>> > > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just >> too >> >>>> > > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like >> it >> >>>> > > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you >> >>>> > > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could run >> like >> >>>> > > this: >> >>>> > > >> >>>> > > * What is FC and how do you install it? >> >>>> > > * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a >> profile >> >>>> > > >> >>>> > > -- >> >>>> > > Paul >> >>>> > > >> >>>> > _______________________________________________ >> >>>> > Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx >> >>>> > To unsubscribe send an email to >> >>>> magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx >> >>>> > Fedora Code of Conduct: https://getfedora.org/code-of-conduct.html >> >>>> > List Guidelines: >> >>>> https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines >> >>>> > List Archives: >> >>>> https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@ >> >>>> > lists.fedoraproject.org/message/7DXFRUSQMU3UQCVXLUE67ZZBKPWXPYFX/ >> >>>> > >> >>>> >> >>>> >> >>>> >> >>>> -- >> >>>> >> >>>> >> >>>> >> >>>> *Buy my books! 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Just Google my name for a complete >> list >> >> of my work.* >> >> >> >> >> _______________________________________________ >> Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx >> To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx >> Fedora Code of Conduct: >> https://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/project/code-of-conduct/ >> List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines >> List Archives: >> https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx >> > -- Oliver Gutierrez Software Engineer - Desktop Management tools Red Hat _______________________________________________ Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Fedora Code of Conduct: https://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/project/code-of-conduct/ List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines List Archives: https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
