Many thanks for your detailed review, Russ! Yuanlong, will there be a new draft version or other edits before the draft is approved? Jari On 17 Nov 2015, at 00:53, Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanlong@xxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Russ, > > Thanks a lot for your review and good observations. > Please see my comments in line. > > Best regards, > Yuanlong > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: Russ Housley [mailto:housley@xxxxxxxxxxxx] >> Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM >> To: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@xxxxxxxx >> Cc: IETF Gen-ART; IETF >> Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review >> Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for >> the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD >> before posting a new version of the draft. >> >> For more information, please see the FAQ at >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 >> Reviewer: Russ Housley >> Review Date: 2015-11-13 >> IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24 >> IESG Telechat date: unknown >> >> Summary: Almost Ready >> >> >> Major Concerns: None >> >> >> Minor Concerns: >> >> Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011]. Should this be >> the 2014 version of the document? If not, please add the informative >> reference for [802.1Q-2011]. >> > [YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014]. > >> >> Other Editorial Comments: >> >> The Abstract should appear on the title page. >> > [YJ] OK. > >> Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1: >> s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also, [MEF6.1] >> needs to be added as a normative reference. >> > [YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2. > >> Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003: >> s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/ Also, >> please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003]. >> > [YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003]. > >> Third level section headings do not have space between the section number >> and the section title. For example: >> s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/ >> > [YJ] OK. > >> In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will allow the "AC" >> labels to fit better on the left: >> >> +----------------------------------------+ >> | VPLS-capable PE model | >> | +---------------+ +------+ | >> | | |==========|TVSI-1|------------ >> +---+ AC | | ------------ |------------ PWs >> |CE |----------| Bridge ------------ |------------ >> +---+ | | | Root & +------+ | >> | | Module | Leaf VLAN o | >> | | | o | >> | | | o | >> | | | o | >> | | | o | >> +---+ AC | | | VLAN-n +------+ | >> |CE |----------| ------------VSI-n |------------- >> +---+ | | |==========| |------------- PWs >> | | | ^ | |------------- >> | +---------------+ | +------+ | >> | | | >> +-------------------------|--------------+ >> LAN emulation Interface >> >> Figure 4 A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI > > > [YJ] OK. > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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