I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 Reviewer: Russ Housley Review Date: 2015-11-13 IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost Ready Major Concerns: None Minor Concerns: Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011]. Should this be the 2014 version of the document? If not, please add the informative reference for [802.1Q-2011]. Other Editorial Comments: The Abstract should appear on the title page. Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1: s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also, [MEF6.1] needs to be added as a normative reference. Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003: s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/ Also, please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003]. Third level section headings do not have space between the section number and the section title. For example: s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/ In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will allow the "AC" labels to fit better on the left: +----------------------------------------+ | VPLS-capable PE model | | +---------------+ +------+ | | | |==========|TVSI-1|------------ +---+ AC | | ------------ |------------ PWs |CE |----------| Bridge ------------ |------------ +---+ | | | Root & +------+ | | | Module | Leaf VLAN o | | | | o | | | | o | | | | o | | | | o | +---+ AC | | | VLAN-n +------+ | |CE |----------| ------------VSI-n |------------- +---+ | | |==========| |------------- PWs | | | ^ | |------------- | +---------------+ | +------+ | | | | +-------------------------|--------------+ LAN emulation Interface Figure 4 A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI