Thank you very much Dale! I know my grammar is not very good, but I continue learning :) Thanks for all the tips and explainations about my mistakes. I value them the most and I'm learning a lot. I will apply the changes to the document and after that I will probably cut it in two parts. The setup and the usage. Will come back with news! Thanks and cheers! On Wed, Jun 27, 2018 at 3:23 AM Dale Raby <daleraby@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Hi Oliver, > > I opened your .txt article in LibreOffice Writer, made notes for you in > red, the saved the altered document with a .odt filename extension. Mostly > it reads coherently and an English speaker might find some of the phrasing > a little unusual, but he would understand most of it. Even us Anglos don't > always agree on how to say some things. > > All in all, its a well-written article. > > On Tue, Jun 26, 2018 at 4:45 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> > wrote: > >> Thank you very much Dale. I'm fixing the whole things you pointed. Almost >> all of them make sense from the IT part. :) >> >> I will finish the modifications maybe today or tomorrown and I will >> change the document to a text document so you can review it better :) >> >> Thanks for your help and your time! >> >> On Sat, Jun 23, 2018 at 4:53 AM Dale Raby <daleraby@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: >> >>> Just put in some suggestions. Your English is better than my Spanish >>> but I found a few minor grammatical errors. >>> >>> The biggest problem I found was that there seems to be a large block of >>> text that is a duplication. The section with the graphics is difficult for >>> me to view with my slow connection here. >>> >>> Google documents are always difficult for me to edit. Google assumes >>> that everyone has very fast connections and modern machines. I have >>> neither. It put me into "suggestion mode", which is actually very clever >>> of them... if only I had a fast connection! >>> >>> Bear in mind, that while I am a native speaker of English and have >>> actually done quite a bit of writing, I am NOT an IT expert. So.... take >>> any suggestions I give you with caution. I could be misunderstanding your >>> intent. >>> >>> I will look at this again tomorrow when I am not half asleep. >>> Neighbor's cattle (Herfords, two heifers, a calf and a 1,200 pound bull) >>> got out onto the road this evening. I and former US Congressman Alan Lasee >>> helped a police officer and the owner get them back into the enclosure. >>> Was quite enough excitement for me! >>> >>> Dale >>> >>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:14 PM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx >>> > wrote: >>> >>>> Thank you very much Mr Raby! Just give me the time to separate it in >>>> sections (so I will need to ad intros and outros for each block) and after >>>> that I will need a review. >>>> >>>> In the meantime, I will give you the access you required :) >>>> >>>> You just need to access the document in this URL >>>> >>>> >>>> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing >>>> >>>> Then Google will allow you to ask for document access and I will >>>> receive a notification to give you the permissions. >>>> >>>> If you do that and you see I had not answered or allowed, please tell >>>> me because maybe the notification is lost in my inbox. >>>> >>>> Again thanks. >>>> >>>> >>>> P.D. Swear words in spanish are usually enough to be very communicative >>>> of your current mood :P >>>> >>>> P.D. 2: After trying to send this email again, google asked me to give >>>> automatic access to view the document to recipients, so maybe you will be >>>> able to see it after receiving this. >>>> >>>> >>>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:35 PM Dale Raby <daleraby@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: >>>> >>>>> Senor Gutierrez: >>>>> >>>>> I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any linguistic >>>>> issues. I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is >>>>> limited >>>>> to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army days. >>>>> >>>>> I need permission to access your document though. >>>>> >>>>> Dale >>>>> >>>>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez < >>>>> ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> >>>>> wrote: >>>>> >>>>> > Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can >>>>> separate >>>>> > them into more "atomic" pieces :) >>>>> > >>>>> > Thanks for reviewing! >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields <stickster@xxxxxxxxx> >>>>> wrote: >>>>> > >>>>> > > On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez < >>>>> ogutierrez@xxxxxxxxxx> >>>>> > > wrote: >>>>> > > > >>>>> > > > Hi there. >>>>> > > > >>>>> > > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to Paul >>>>> for >>>>> > > review. >>>>> > > > >>>>> > > > >>>>> > > https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_ >>>>> > Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing >>>>> > > > >>>>> > > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and as >>>>> English >>>>> > is >>>>> > > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is most >>>>> > welcome. >>>>> > > >>>>> > > Hi Oliver, >>>>> > > >>>>> > > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is just too >>>>> > > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like it >>>>> > > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can you >>>>> > > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? 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