On 04/18/2017 04:09 PM, Jeff Sandys wrote: > > M. Duffy, > > I think the structure of the statement is wrong and could be improved > by changing it like this: > > **Fedora creates an innovative open platform for users, community > members and software developers to build solutions that lights up > hardware, containers and clouds.** > > One test of a good statement (like a good image) is you can redact > parts of it and it still makes sense. People build solutions that > light up clouds, I'm sure that is an image you can work with. > The "lights up" piece still seems a bit off to me, fairly cheesy. We could illustrate "lighting up" without literally needing that term in the statement. ~m _______________________________________________ council-discuss mailing list -- council-discuss@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to council-discuss-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
