Pete, thanks for your review. I entered a No Objection ballot. Alissa > On Jan 10, 2020, at 12:50 AM, Pete Resnick via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Reviewer: Pete Resnick > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Note that while this is labeled a Last Call review, this review comes well > after the Last Call completed. However, the author and AD felt it would be > useful anyway since the document has not yet been updated for Last Call > comments. > > Document: draft-ietf-stir-passport-divert-07 > Reviewer: Pete Resnick > Review Date: 2020-01-09 > IETF LC End Date: 2019-12-02 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: Ready with Nits > > While I found the document (and particularly section 4) very technically dense, > I think the detail will help implementers tremendously. Nothing other than a > few editorial issues. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Section 3, paragraph 1: > > Note that > a new PASSporT is only necessary when the canonical form of the > "dest" identifier (per the canonicalization procedures in [RFC8224] > Section 8) changes due to this retargeting. If the canonical form of > the "dest" identifiier is not changed during retargeting, then a new > PASSporT with a "div" claim MUST NOT be produced. > > Seems to me that these two sentences should be in their own paragraph. It took > me a second to figure out that the following sentence was not related to these. > > Section 4: > > ...Other using protocols of PASSporT > > Don't you mean "Other protocols using PASSporT"? > > Section 4.2, paragraph 2: > > I think you mean "necessarily", not "necessary" > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
