I have the following comments about draft-ietf-anima-voucher-05.txt. Section 6, para 2. I cannot parse this sentence. It has no verb. Para 3. Please give citations for DER and X.690. Section 6.2, para 1. The second sentence is not a sentence. It has no main clause. Section 8.1, para 3, last line. "should not" -> "SHOULD NOT" I have also sent several grammar/formatting corrections to the ANIMA list, as these are not substantive. Bill Atwood On 28/09/2017 9:24 AM, The IESG wrote: > > The IESG has received a request from the Autonomic Networking Integrated > Model and Approach WG (anima) to consider the following document: - 'Voucher > Profile for Bootstrapping Protocols' > <draft-ietf-anima-voucher-05.txt> as Proposed Standard > > The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits final > comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the > ietf@xxxxxxxx mailing lists by 2017-10-12. Exceptionally, comments may be > sent to iesg@xxxxxxxx instead. In either case, please retain the beginning of > the Subject line to allow automated sorting. > > Abstract > > > This document defines a strategy to securely assign a pledge to an > owner, using an artifact signed, directly or indirectly, by the > pledge's manufacturer. This artifact is known as a "voucher". > > The voucher artifact is a YANG-defined JSON document that has (by > default) been signed using a PKCS#7 structure. The voucher artifact > is normally generated by the pledge's manufacturer or delegate (i.e. > the Manufacturer Authorized Signing Authority). > > This document only defines the voucher artifact, leaving it to other > documents to describe specialized protocols for accessing it. > > > > > The file can be obtained via > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-anima-voucher/ > > IESG discussion can be tracked via > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-anima-voucher/ballot/ > > > No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D. > > > > > _______________________________________________ > Anima mailing list > Anima@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/anima > -- Dr. J.W. Atwood, Eng. tel: +1 (514) 848-2424 x3046 Distinguished Professor Emeritus fax: +1 (514) 848-2830 Department of Computer Science and Software Engineering Concordia University EV 3.185 email:william.atwood@xxxxxxxxxxxx 1455 de Maisonneuve Blvd. West http://users.encs.concordia.ca/~bill Montreal, Quebec Canada H3G 1M8