Genart last call review of draft-ietf-nvo3-mcast-framework-09

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Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-nvo3-mcast-framework-09
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 2017-10-04
IETF LC End Date: 2017-10-02
IESG Telechat date: 2017-10-12

Summary: The document is almost ready for publication, but there are a few
issues that I'd like the authors to address.

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues:

Q1:
The Introduction says that the document "provides a framework". I guess it
depends on how you define "framework", but to me it seems like the document
only evaluates and discusses different mechanisms - which the text also says.

Nits/editorial comments:

Q2:
The Abstract says: "This document discusses a framework of supporting..."

Assuming the document actually does provide a framework (see Q1), I would
suggest to say "provides" (which you also use in the Introduction) instead of
"discusses".

Q3:
The Introduction says: "Network virtualization using Overlays over Layer 3
(NVO3) is a Technology... "

Please add a reference to RFC 7365 and/or RFC 8014 on the first occurrence of
NVO3.

Q4:
I don't think the last paragraph of the Introdution (Section 1) belongs to the
Introduction. It should be in a terminology section. In addition, I don't think
you need to say that "the user is assumed to be familiar with...". You should
simply reference the RFCs for the terminology used in the document.





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