Hi, Some comments. 1) I object to the change in the first sentence of the Introduction: "The work of the IETF relies on cooperation ..." has become "The work of the IETF relies on collaboration...". I really think that "cooperation" is a significantly better word. I want more than collaborators in the IETF (people who labor with me). I want a spirit of cooperation. Also, "collaborate" has one very negative meaning in English. (Please compare http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/cooperate and http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/collaborate.) 2) In the item "4. Individuals are prepared to contribute to the ongoing work of the group", I quite understand why some text was considered objectionable and was deleted. But I think the the following text should not have been deleted: "Working Group meetings run on a very limited time schedule, and are not intended for the education of individuals. The work of the group will continue on the mailing list, and many questions would be better expressed on the list in the months that follow." I would probably tune the last part so that it reads" "Working Group meetings run on a very limited time schedule, and are not intended for the education of individuals. The work of the group will continue on the mailing list, and questions can be asked and answered on the list." 3) The Security Considerations say: "Guidelines about IETF conduct do not affect the security of the Internet in any way." I'm not so sure. Try this: "Guidelines about IETF conduct do not directly affect the security of the Internet." (I thought about drafting some text about how misconduct could damage security, but I think that rat hole can be avoided in this particular document.) 4) Appendix A: Reporting transgressions of the guidelines Maybe just add a hint about the ombudsperson? "At the time of writing, the IETF is putting in place an anti-harassment policy and an ombudsperson to handle complaints." Brian