Dear Even and all, Thank you for your comments. I have revised the draft based on your comments. http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-nsis-applicability-mobility-signaling-18.txt The changes are: > 1. Section 6 says that topics is this section are out-of-scope of this > document and detailed operations are not described yet section 6.1.1 provide > what looks like detailed operations. Changed the text to, "Topics in this section are out-of-scope of this document. Detailed operations in this section are just for future references." > 2. I am not sure what is the value in appendix A, it looks to me redundant > after reading the rest of the document removed. > 1. All over the document there are abbreviations that are not specified in > full or not specified the first time used. Examples are MRI, MN, CN, AR. NR, > SII, HA, FA, QNE, QSPEC,RSN. I suggest that the editor will go through the > document and specify all abbreviations. I add abbreviations to each term. > 2. In section 4.2 and 4.3 in the beginning instead of the following figure > suggest to write Figure 1 or Figure 2. I also think that the flow > description should be enumerated using the numbers from figure 1. Done. > 3. In section 4.2 "the MN must get to know" maybe say "The MN need to > acquire" done > 4. In section 5.3.1 "The second one is otherwise, and here the tunneling > path is transparent as a logical link to NSIS signaling > [draft-ietf-nsis-tunnel].". I am not sure what is meant by "the second one > is otherwise". Section 5 is harmonized with NSIS tunneling draft ( [draft-ietf-nsis-tunnel]). And this unclear text ("the second one is otherwise") is revised. > 5. In section 6.1.1 there is a figure without a number. There are > figure 8 and 9 and in the middle this one with no number. Number added. > 6. In section 4.4.2 in the sentence "(how this is can be noticed is > out of scope of NSIS, yet, e.g., GIST will eventually no this through > undelivered messages)" should be "know" and not "no". Done. Thanks, Takako _______________________________________________ Ietf mailing list Ietf@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ietf