Re: Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-nsis-applicability-mobility-signaling-17

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Dear Even and all,

Thank you for your comments.

I have revised the draft based on your comments.

http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-nsis-applicability-mobility-signaling-18.txt

The changes are:

> 1.  Section 6 says that topics is this section are out-of-scope of this
> document and detailed operations are not described yet section 6.1.1 provide
> what looks like detailed operations.

Changed the text to, "Topics in
   this section are out-of-scope of this document.  Detailed operations
   in this section are just for future references."

> 2.  I am not sure what is the value in appendix A, it looks to me redundant
> after reading the rest of the document

removed.

> 1.  All over the document there are abbreviations that are not specified in
> full or not specified the first time used. Examples are MRI, MN, CN, AR. NR,
> SII, HA, FA, QNE, QSPEC,RSN. I suggest that the editor will go through the
> document and specify all abbreviations.

I add abbreviations to each term.


> 2.  In section 4.2 and 4.3 in the beginning instead of the following figure
> suggest to write Figure 1 or Figure 2. I also think that the flow
> description should be enumerated using the numbers from figure 1.

Done.

> 3.  In section 4.2 "the MN must get to know" maybe say "The MN need to
> acquire"

done

> 4.  In section 5.3.1 "The second one is otherwise, and here the tunneling
> path is transparent as a logical link to NSIS signaling
> [draft-ietf-nsis-tunnel].". I am not sure what is meant by "the second one
> is otherwise".

Section 5 is harmonized with NSIS tunneling draft ( [draft-ietf-nsis-tunnel]).
And this unclear text ("the second one is otherwise") is revised.


> 5.       In section 6.1.1 there is a figure without a number. There are
> figure 8 and 9 and in the middle this one with no number.

Number added.


> 6.       In section 4.4.2 in the sentence "(how this is can be noticed is
> out of scope of NSIS, yet, e.g., GIST will eventually no this through
> undelivered messages)" should be "know" and not "no".

Done.

Thanks,

Takako

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