[Last-Call] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-teas-applicability-actn-slicing-07

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Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-teas-applicability-actn-slicing-07
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2024-08-09
IETF LC End Date: 2024-08-08
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This is an informational draft on how (IETF) network slicing in TE
networks can be accomplished using concepts from RFC 8453 and RFC 9543. This is
well outside of my wheelhouse, so I’m not providing any real technical input.
There are some editorial items in the document that ought to be fixed before
publication. [Ready with nits]

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

Page 1, Abstract, 4th paragraph: delete the comma between “ACTN” and “and”.

Page 6, section 2.2, 1st sentence: delete the comma between “network” and “and”.

Page 6, section 2.3, 2nd paragraph: change “sharing or” to “sharing of”.

Page 6, section 1st bullet item: delete the comma after “congestion”.

Page 11, section 3.4.1, 1st bullet item: change “is” to “are”.

Page 20, section 6, 1st paragraph, 3rd sentence: change “providers” to
“provider’s”.

Page 20, section 6, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: change “risk data” to “risk of
data”. Insert “and” before “no transfer of knowledge”.


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