Hi Sue,
Thanks for your review.
On Tue, Jun 11, 2024 at 2:55 PM Susan Hares via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote:
Reviewer: Susan Hares
Review result: Has Nits
Status:
General Comment: Thank you for your careful work on this document.
Ready with Editorial Nits:
#1 page 25 - add period to sentence
identity vn-computation-error-not-ready {
base vn-computation-error-reason;
description
"VN computation has failed because the MDSC is not
ready";
}
Dhruv: Added '.' to all description clauses.
#2 Security section: Grammar
Old/
* ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
the access points in the VN service are attached. /
New:/
* ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
the access points in the VN service are attached. /
Old:/
* vn-ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences
how the VN service is delivered. /
New:/
* vn-ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences
how the VN service is delivered.
/
Old:/
* vn: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
the VN service is delivered. By accessing the following data
nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./
New:/
* vn: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
the VN service is delivered. By accessing the following data
nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./
Old:/
* vn-member: this list includes a set of sensitive data that
influences how the VN member in the VN service is delivered. By
accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be able to
manipulate the VN member./
New:/
* vn-member: This list includes a set of sensitive data that
influences how the VN member in the VN service is delivered. By
accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be able to
manipulate the VN member./
Dhruv: Ack, updated in my local copy!
Thanks!
Dhruv
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