Re: [Last-Call] [Wish] Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-wish-whip-13

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Thank you Russ for your review, comments inline.

On Fri, Mar 15, 2024 at 12:59 AM Russ Housley via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote:
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Has Issues

Minor Concerns:

Figures 2, 3, and 4 are not referenced from body of the document.  It is
best to include a reference in the body that offers some description of what
the reader is expected to learn from the figure.  When I as a Security AD,
the other Security AD was blind.  The text-to-audio system that he used was
surprisingly good, but it could not handle ASCII art.  The discussion of
the figures was vital to him being able to understand a document.  Please
help readers that depend on such tools.

I was not aware of this, thank you very much for pointing it out, seems something important to be addressed.

Do you have any guideline or example about how to best make the change so it works properly with screen readers?
 

Section 4.2 says:

   In order to reduce the complexity of implementing WHIP in both
   clients and Media Servers, WHIP imposes the following restrictions
   regarding WebRTC usage:

I think it would be more clear to say that each of the following subsections
discuss restrictions for WebRTC usage.


 I think that is clear with the current text, but it doesn't hurt to add more explicit wording if you feel so.

How would be the best way of doing these changes? I would prefer not to have to submit a new draft for these editorial changes and have to start again a WGLC & IESG review. 

Best regards
Sergio
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