Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-?? Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review Date: 2023-12-18 IETF LC End Date: 2023-12-19 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: The document summarizes the OAM requirements of DetNet networks. The document provides a good background of the necessary OAM components and presents the requirements of the OAM solutions. Major issues: * Figure should be svg because on a device that rewraps the text this will get (is already) totally messed up on smaller screens. * Suggest a privacy considerations section that at least references the text in rfc9055, or perhaps elaborates on it given the OAM provides a lot of signals. Minor issues: * It seems to me that there is no meaningful difference between definitions and terminology so perhaps just collapse these two sections, or provide some other compelling reason to present them separately to the reader. * This is a general review and I am not an expert so take this for what it's worth, but I am unclear on why there would be so many MUSTs for monitoring requirements and perhaps they should be should? Nits/editorial comments: * 5. Are the paragraph indents intended to be bulleted or numbered? * 6.1 and 6.2 subtitles can remove "Requirements on OAM for DetNet" as they are redundant -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
