On 15/11/2022 02:47, Hongji Zhao wrote: > Hi Tom, > > Thanks a lot for your comments. Please check inline. > > BR/Hongji > > -----Original Message----- > From: tom petch <daedulus@xxxxxxxxxxxxx> > Sent: 2022年11月14日 20:06 > > On 25/10/2022 20:27, The IESG wrote: >> >> The IESG has received a request from the Protocols for IP Multicast WG >> (pim) to consider the following document: - 'A Yang Data Model for IGMP/MLD Proxy' >> <draft-ietf-pim-igmp-mld-proxy-yang-07.txt> as Proposed Standard >> >> The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits >> final comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the >> last-call@xxxxxxxx mailing lists by 2022-11-15. Exceptionally, >> comments may be sent to iesg@xxxxxxxx instead. In either case, please >> retain the beginning of the Subject line to allow automated sorting. >> > > Last time I got this wrong but I believe that 225.0 is not appropriate for documentation use. It should be 233.252.0/24 as per RFC5771.acc > [Authors] Accepted > > In places, the spacing is double line spaced (which has appeared in > other recent I-Ds). I see this in parts of s.5 and s.6.1 and in thee > YANG Editors. > [Authors] Accepted > > Simplified BSD should now be Revised BSD. > [Authors] Accepted > > YANG has a 'should not' but no reference to RFC8174. > [Authors] YANG has a 'must not' constraint, shall I use 'must not' in the description instead of 'should not'? > RFC8174 clarify the UPPERCASE usage of the key words, but I would like to use lowercase. Is it necessary to reference it? Using lower case is fine if that is what you want to do and in such a case I see no reference to RFC8174 as needed. I flagged it as something that is often raised as a query by the IESG but if it is the consensus of the WG then that is ok. This is a corner case since the text is in a message and if you make that UPPER case then users not familiar with the quirks of the IETF may wonder what is going on! Tom Petch > > 'membership report or leave' would be clearer to me with another word or two, such as 'message' > [Authors] Accepted > > Tom Petch > >> Abstract >> >> >> This document defines a YANG data model that can be used to >> configure and manage Internet Group Management Protocol (IGMP) or >> Multicast Listener Discovery (MLD) proxy devices. The YANG module in >> this document conforms to Network Management Datastore Architecture >> (NMDA). >> >> >> >> >> The file can be obtained via >> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-pim-igmp-mld-proxy-yang/ >> >> >> >> No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D. >> >> >> >> >> >> _______________________________________________ >> IETF-Announce mailing list >> IETF-Announce@xxxxxxxx >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ietf-announce >> . >> > . > -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
