Hi Gyan, Thank you very much for your review and feedback! I have added reference to STAMP and RESTCONF as you suggested. I'm a little confused by the difference between OAM-based ping and non OAM-based ping. Could you please elaborate on this? Please also note that we don't intend to provide an exhaustive survey on all existing OAM tools and proposals, rather we just give some typical representative for each category. Also, we focus more on the underlying techniques (e.g., ping) rather than their adaptation to various dataplanes. Of course, if you think it's important to include those, I'll add a paragraph in the dataplane telemetry subsection. Best regards, Haoyu -----Original Message----- From: Gyan Mishra via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> Sent: Saturday, October 23, 2021 5:45 PM To: gen-art@xxxxxxxx Cc: draft-ietf-opsawg-ntf.all@xxxxxxxx; last-call@xxxxxxxx; opsawg@xxxxxxxx Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-ntf-09 Reviewer: Gyan Mishra Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://nam11.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Ftrac.ietf.org%2Ftrac%2Fgen%2Fwiki%2FGenArtfaq&data=04%7C01%7Chaoyu.song%40futurewei.com%7C0dd4f94d2979459a271508d996878f14%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C1%7C637706331261985874%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJWIjoiMC4wLjAwMDAiLCJQIjoiV2luMzIiLCJBTiI6Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0%3D%7C3000&sdata=DSab4L9VbFk5ow3f8GuLa5EDgvTjB%2Fs6e2A3g54Oej0%3D&reserved=0>. Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-ntf-?? Reviewer: Gyan Mishra Review Date: 2021-10-23 IETF LC End Date: 2021-10-27 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: This draft analyzes the overall framework of network telemetry technologies that exist today and future evolution of telemetry technology and data gathering from a control plane, data plane and management plane perspective. Document is well written. Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: Section 4.1.3 Forwarding plane telemetry does not include STAMP RFC 8762. Mention traditional non OAM based ping ICMP Echo snd Echo-Reply. Also for OAM based maybe list the variety of OAM based ping such as for all data planes such as MPLS, RSVP-TE, L2 VPN pdeudowire OAM ping VCCV (Virtual Circuit Connection Verification) RFC 5085 RFC 7189, RFC 5586 GACH PW OAM. Any of the RFCs listed here maybe include as informative references. Also NVO3 VXLAN and BIER OAM. SFC service plane RFC 8924 SFC OAM. Also DETNET forwarding and service sub planes DETNET OAM. SDN and SD-WAN, PCEP, BGP all centralized controller based architecture can also be used for network telemetry. RESTCONF REST API is missing should be mentioned -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
