On Mon, Jun 15, 2015 at 05:12:19PM +1000, Ryan Lerch wrote: > On 06/15/2015 04:19 PM, Sumit Bhardwaj wrote: > >Hi Ryan, > > > >Looks good to me :) > >Regards, > >Sumit Bhardwaj > >On Monday 15 June 2015 11:37 AM, Ryan Lerch wrote: > >>On 06/15/2015 03:00 PM, Sumit Bhardwaj wrote: > >>>Hi Ryan, > >>> > >>>Thanks for the great suggestions. The pleasure is all mine, Fedora has > >>>brought so many positive changes in my world of computing, If I can do > >>>anything for the project, it's an honor and a privilege. > >>> > >>>I have tried to incorporate your suggestions in the article and > >>>resubmitted it for review. Please have a look and let me know if any > >>>further refinement would be good. > >>> > >>>Thanks again. > >>>Regards, > >>>Sumit Bhardwaj > >>>On Monday 15 June 2015 09:14 AM, Ryan Lerch wrote: > >>>>Hi Sumit! > >>>> > >>>>First up, thanks for submitting your first post to the Fedora > >>>>Magazine. I have done a quick review of your post, and here are a > >>>>few ideas / suggestions from me. (other editors, feel free to pitch > >>>>in ideas too) > >>>> > >>>>First up, i'd probably be a bit more direct and informative with the > >>>>title, instead of "Fedora 22 Intel Graphics Woes : Here's some > >>>>help" > >>>>maybe something like "Solution for graphics issues on some Intel > >>>>graphics chipsets in Fedora 22" (just a suggestion, feel free to > >>>>change and or edit too :) ) > >>>> > >>>>Secondly, i'd probably remove the majority of the first paragraph > >>>>and lead with the issue itself (your third paragraph) -- most people > >>>>get to the magazine via third party links, so starting with the info > >>>>they came for always works well. I'm thinking something like: > >>>>""" > >>>>Fedora 22 was [link to release annonce on fedora mag]released > >>>>recently[/link], and if you are using a Pre-Sandybridge era > >>>>Intel-based graphics chipset (For example, Intel 4 series > >>>>motherboards with G41 chipset and GMA X4500 graphics), chances are > >>>>that you might be facing graphics issues like shown in below > >>>>screenshot on Fedora 22. > >>>>[screenshot] > >>>>""" > >>>> > >>>>Then after the screenshot, have your brief description of the > >>>>problem, covering the points that fedora switched to a new accel > >>>>method that doesnt work so well with older chipsets. > >>>> > >>>>Then put the solution. I found the bug for this issue > >>>>(https://bugzilla.redhat.com/show_bug.cgi?id=1226743) which might be > >>>>worth mentioning. And there updated kernels (kernel-4.0.5-300.fc22 > >>>>and kernel-4.0.5-200.fc21) that fix this issue is already in > >>>>updates-testing, so it is probably a better solution to recommend > >>>>that people install the new package with the fix from updates > >>>>testing, or wait for the package to hit the proper repos (rather > >>>>than editing a config file that they may forget about and cause them > >>>>issues in the future.) > >>>> > >>>>cheers, > >>>>ryanlerch > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>> > >>Just did a quick edit, and added a quick howto on getting the packages > >>from updates-testing (in case the reader doesnt know how to), and added > >>some emphasis on the note that the workaround is a temp solution. > >> > >>Does that look ok to you? feel free to revert if you don't agree :) > >> > >>cheers, > >>ryanlerch > > > Looks good! > > Can one of the other editors have a quick sanity check of the post this > morning (Monday morning USA time), and publish if it is ok sometime this > morning? I made a few more tweaks and will publish it. -- Paul W. Frields http://paul.frields.org/ gpg fingerprint: 3DA6 A0AC 6D58 FEC4 0233 5906 ACDB C937 BD11 3717 http://redhat.com/ - - - - http://pfrields.fedorapeople.org/ The open source story continues to grow: http://opensource.com -- marketing mailing list marketing@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx List info or to change your subscription: https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing