I'm pretty happy with the language now; my "pretty much final" edits are
in and live (soon).
The tempting link "Learn more >>" goes to a Wiki page. Do we want to
make a new, static version of that page, at least for the F7
launch-frame? I think, yes.
I changed the "leading edge" stuff to read:
"The Fedora Project leads the advancement of free and open source
software. When you use Fedora, this software is in your hands."
I also trimmed out a bunch of extraneous language, made passive to
active voice changes, dropped distracting pronouns, and tried to reduce
the hype-speech ("the most bestest ev4r!!!!1!!!").
== FC6 to F7 conversion ==
In addition to updating the images, the following needs to be updated:
* Direct links to FC6 Installation Guide need to point to F7 version
* ???
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