Author: kwade
Update of /cvs/fedora/web/static
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv8375
Modified Files:
get-fedora.html index.html join-fedora.html
Log Message:
Language edits all over the place; trimmed out a bunch of extraneous language, made passive to active voice changes, dropped distracting pronouns, and tried to reduce the hype-speech. Other questions/observations sent to f-websites-l.
Index: get-fedora.html
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</div>
<div id="content">
<h2>Fedora, For You.</h2>
- <h3>Got high-speed internet?</h3>
- <p>You can download Fedora via the web or via <a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bit_torrent";>BitTorrent</a>. You will find links to each below.</p>
- <p>Please read through our <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/Download/ExportRegulations";>export regulations</a> before downloading Fedora. <strong>If this is your first time downloading Fedora</strong>, you'll want to review the <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/Download#Understand";>installation instructions</a> first before choosing one of the three download methods below.</p>
+ <h3>High-speed internet?</h3>
+ <p>Download Fedora via the web or via <a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bit_torrent";>BitTorrent</a>. Links to each are below.</p>
+ <p>Read through our <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/Download/ExportRegulations";>export regulations</a> before downloading Fedora. <strong>If this is your first time downloading Fedora</strong>, review the <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/Download#Understand";>installation instructions</a> before choosing one of the three download methods below.</p>
<ul class="download">
<li><a name="mirrors" href="http://mirrors.fedoraproject.org/publiclist";>Download full installation media from the Web</a>: choose a mirror close to you geographically for a faster download.</li>
<li><a name="bittorrent" href="http://torrent.fedoraproject.org/";>Download from BitTorrent</a>: requires a BitTorrent client. <strong>Recommended for advanced users only.</strong></li>
<li><a name="networkinstall" href="http://docs.fedoraproject.org/install-guide/fc6/en/ch-other-install-methods.html";>Network Install</a>: Download a small boot image and download Fedora as you install. <strong>Recommended for advanced users only.</strong></li>
</ul>
<h3>Slow internet? No internet?</h3>
- <p>You can request to have a copy of Fedora sent to you via postal mail.</p>
+ <p>Request to have a copy of Fedora sent via postal mail.</p>
<ul class="download">
- <li>You can purchase installation media for Fedora from <a name="media" href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/OnlineVendors";>online vendors</a> or <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/LocalVendors";>local vendor</a> in your area.</li>
- <li>Can't afford the price of installation media? You may request Fedora installation media from the <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/FreeMedia";>Fedora Free Media</a> program.</li>
+ <li>Purchase installation media for Fedora from <a name="media" href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/OnlineVendors";>online vendors</a> or a <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/LocalVendors";>local vendor</a> in your area.</li>
+ <li>Can't afford the price of installation media? Request Fedora installation media from the <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/FreeMedia";>Fedora Free Media</a> program.</li>
</ul>
<p>
- When you place an order with <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/SponsoredMedia";>participating vendors</a>, you can elect to also sponsor the cost of additional media for others who cannot otherwise afford it (for example, people in developing nations.) Please consider participating in the <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/SponsoredMedia";>Fedora Sponsored Media Program</a>.
+ When you place an order with a <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/SponsoredMedia";>participating vendor</a>, you may also sponsor the cost of media for users who cannot afford it, such as people in developing nations. Consider participating in the <a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Distribution/SponsoredMedia";>Fedora Sponsored Media Program</a>.
</p>
</div>
</div>
<div id="bottom">
<div id="footer">
<p class="copy">
- Copyright © 2007 Red Hat, Inc. and others. All Rights Reserved.
+ Copyright © 2003 - 2007 Red Hat, Inc. and others. All Rights Reserved.
</p>
<p class="disclaimer">
The Fedora Project is maintained and driven by the community and sponsored by Red Hat. This is a community maintained site. Red Hat is not responsible for content.
Index: index.html
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Fedora is a Linux operating system that showcases the latest in free and open source software. Fedora is <strong>always free for anyone to use, modify, and distribute.</strong> It is built by people across the globe who work together as a community: the Fedora Project. The Fedora Project is open and anyone is welcome to join.
</p>
<p>
- The Fedora Project <strong>leads the advancement of free and open source software.</strong> When you use Fedora, the leading edge of software created by the Linux community is in your hands.
+ The Fedora Project <strong>leads the advancement of free and open source software.</strong> When you use Fedora, this software is in your hands.
</p>
<a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Overview";>Learn more >></a>
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@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@
<div id="bottom">
<div id="footer">
<p class="copy">
- Copyright © 2007 Red Hat, Inc. and others. All Rights Reserved.
+ Copyright © 2003 - 2007 Red Hat, Inc. and others. All Rights Reserved.
</p>
<p class="disclaimer">
The Fedora Project is maintained and driven by the community and sponsored by Red Hat. This is a community maintained site. Red Hat is not responsible for content.
Index: join-fedora.html
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<div id="content">
<h2>Join Fedora.</h2>
- <p>If you want to take an active hand in making Fedora even better, there are many ways you can help. What role do you want to fill?</p>
- <p><strong>Click on the role you'd like to fill below to learn more about how you can help the Fedora project.</strong></p>
+ <p>If you want to take an active hand in making Fedora even
+ better, there are many ways to help. What role do you want to fill?</p>
+ <p><strong>Click on a role below to learn more about how you can help the Fedora Project.</strong></p>
<ul class="roles">
- <li><a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Join#ContentDeveloper";>
- <img src="images/ContentDeveloper.png" alt="Content Developer" /><br />
- Content Developer<br />(writer)
+ <li><a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Join#ContentWriter";>
+ <img src="images/ContentDeveloper.png" alt="Content Writer" /><br />
+ Content Writer<br />
</a></li>
<li><a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Join#Designer";>
<img src="images/Designer.png" alt="Designer" /><br />
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<div id="bottom">
<div id="footer">
<p class="copy">
- Copyright © 2007 Red Hat, Inc. and others. All Rights Reserved.
+ Copyright © 2003 - 2007 Red Hat, Inc. and others. All Rights Reserved.
</p>
<p class="disclaimer">
The Fedora Project is maintained and driven by the community and sponsored by Red Hat. This is a community maintained site. Red Hat is not responsible for content.
