I saw the snippet after I wrote this -- thanks! I also made that more active, with a call-to-action (such as "Learn how to," "Read about," etc.). Let me know if some of the changes I made make sense. The passive/active part takes some practice, it's not always easy. In fact, I couldn't get that to go "green" without goofing the text up too much. As i said, the article was a good one so these are all just fine-tuning. Paul On Wed, Apr 17, 2019 at 8:32 AM Steven Snow <s40w5s@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > I did use the Yoast SEO, and I worked at trying to get the readability > score up, for all of Sunday morning,without tainting the actual content > or message the author was posting about. I did add to the Snippet to > bring it into the green zone. As for scheduling, I meant to publish last > night but there were some matters pressing I had to attend to. Timing is > everything some days. > > SDS > > On 17/04/19 08:26 AM, Paul Frields wrote: > > Overall I think this article turned out very good. A couple points, > > though... I recommend using the Yoast SEO and readability plugins to > > help guide writing. For instance, this article shows up with too many > > passive voice sentences. In that case, it's useful to go back and > > rewrite to make the prose stronger. If you can put "by Klingons" at > > the end of the sentence and it makes grammatical and syntactical > > sense, it's passive voice. So for example: > > > > Passive: Using the --rebuild option, the RAID array can be > > reassembled. ["...by Klingons" works, so rewrite.] > > Active (better): Use the --rebuild option to reassemble the RAID > > array. ["...by Klingons" test fails.] > > > > Also the plugin notes this article could use some breaking up with > > subheadings for more readability. > > > > There's also a snippet that should be filled out for SEO, so search > > engines show the right kind of excerpt. I made a few tweaks and > > will publish since no one scheduled it already. > > > > > > Paul > > > > On Mon, Apr 15, 2019 at 11:15 AM Steven Snow <s40w5s@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > >> You're welcome Gregory, interesting topic and good article. I couldn't > >> try it out though which sort of sucks, but that is my setup as it stands > >> and nothing to do with the topic. :-) > >> > >> > >> On 15/04/19 10:14 AM, Gregory Lee Bartholomew wrote: > >>> Thanks Steven. I think the way you re-phrased some of the statements is a > >>> definite improvement. :-) > >>> > >>> On Sun, 2019-04-14 at 10:52 -0400, Steven Snow wrote: > >>>> Edited the mdadm > >>>> On 10/04/19 04:59 PM, Paul W. Frields wrote: > >>>>> Minutes: https://meetbot.fedoraproject.org/fedora-meeting/2019-04-10/magazine.2019-04-10-20.02.html > >>>>> Minutes (text): https://meetbot.fedoraproject.org/fedora-meeting/2019-04-10/magazine.2019-04-10-20.02.txt > >>>>> Log: https://meetbot.fedoraproject.org/fedora-meeting/2019-04-10/magazine.2019-04-10-20.02.log.html > >>>>> > >>>>> * * * > >>>>> ========================================= > >>>>> #fedora-meeting: Magazine editorial board > >>>>> ========================================= > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> Meeting started by stickster at 20:02:01 UTC. The full logs are > >>>>> available at > >>>>> https://meetbot.fedoraproject.org/fedora-meeting/2019-04-10/magazine.2019-04-10-20.02.log.html > >>>>> . > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> Meeting summary > >>>>> --------------- > >>>>> * Roll call (stickster, 20:02:05) > >>>>> > >>>>> * Last week stats (stickster, 20:04:09) > >>>>> * Week of April 1: 77.3K pageviews, up significantly from previous > >>>>> week 63K (stickster, 20:04:38) > >>>>> * March 2019 - over 295K pageviews, not too shabby either (stickster, > >>>>> 20:05:56) > >>>>> > >>>>> * Social network access (stickster, 20:07:43) > >>>>> * ACTION: stickster email bkp to see about extending social network > >>>>> access (stickster, 20:11:52) > >>>>> > >>>>> * Pending review posts (stickster, 20:12:18) > >>>>> * LINK: > >>>>> https://fedoramagazine.org/wp-admin/edit.php?post_status=pending > >>>>> (stickster, 20:12:32) > >>>>> * --- How do you Fedora? --- (stickster, 20:13:38) > >>>>> * LINK: https://fedoramagazine.org/?p=27043&preview=1&_ppp=fc778750cc > >>>>> (stickster, 20:13:58) > >>>>> * ACTION: stickster edit newest HDYF article and publish 2019-04-12 > >>>>> (stickster, 20:15:19) > >>>>> > >>>>> * Drafts to review (stickster, 20:16:28) > >>>>> * LINK: > >>>>> https://fedoramagazine.org/wp-admin/edit.php?post_status=draft&orderby=date&order=desc > >>>>> (stickster, 20:16:30) > >>>>> * ACTION: jakfrost edit the mdadm primer article (stickster, > >>>>> 20:25:01) > >>>> Edited 20190414095900 Needs an image I think. > >>>> jakfrost > >>>>> * ACTION: ryanlerch do image for mdadm article (stickster, 20:26:05) > >>>>> * --- K3s on Fedora IoT --- (stickster, 20:26:24) > >>>>> * LINK: https://fedoramagazine.org/?p=25824&preview=1&_ppp=837d26e2cf > >>>>> (stickster, 20:26:42) > >>>>> * ACTION: ryanlerch edit/image/schedule K3s on Fedora IoT article for > >>>>> Monday Apr 15 (stickster, 20:31:35) > >>>>> * --- FFSend --- (stickster, 20:32:03) > >>>>> * LINK: https://fedoramagazine.org/?p=25821&preview=1&_ppp=b5ece44cfd > >>>>> (stickster, 20:34:22) > >>>>> * ACTION: stickster edit/image for FFSend article for Fri 2019-Apr-19 > >>>>> (stickster, 20:36:28) > >>>>> * --- converted video to DVD on Fedora --- (stickster, 20:37:30) > >>>>> * ACTION: stickster email DVD article author to advise on status > >>>>> (stickster, 20:42:34) > >>>>> * ACTION: stickster see if plugin for edit-flow is updated properly > >>>>> (stickster, 20:42:45) > >>>>> > >>>>> * Pitches to review (stickster, 20:47:18) > >>>>> * --- Tuning shell on WS/SB --- (stickster, 20:47:29) > >>>>> * LINK: https://fedoramagazine.org/?p=26993&preview=1&_ppp=2040644edc > >>>>> (stickster, 20:47:31) > >>>>> * ACTION: jakfrost email pitch author for shell tuning and get them > >>>>> into drafting (stickster, 20:53:52) > >>>>> > >>>>> * Publishing schedule! (stickster, 20:55:46) > >>>>> * AGREED: Fri Apr 12: HDYF (stickster) -- Mon Apr 15: K3s (ryanlerch) > >>>>> -- Wed Apr 17: mdadm (jakfrost edit, ryanlerch image) -- Fri Apr 19: > >>>>> FFSend (stickster) (stickster, 20:58:02) > >>>>> > >>>>> Meeting ended at 20:58:22 UTC. > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> Action Items > >>>>> ------------ > >>>>> * stickster email bkp to see about extending social network access > >>>>> * stickster edit newest HDYF article and publish 2019-04-12 > >>>>> * jakfrost edit the mdadm primer article > >>>>> * ryanlerch do image for mdadm article > >>>>> * ryanlerch edit/image/schedule K3s on Fedora IoT article for Monday Apr > >>>>> 15 > >>>>> * stickster edit/image for FFSend article for Fri 2019-Apr-19 > >>>>> * stickster email DVD article author to advise on status > >>>>> * stickster see if plugin for edit-flow is updated properly > >>>>> * jakfrost email pitch author for shell tuning and get them into > >>>>> drafting > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> Action Items, by person > >>>>> ----------------------- > >>>>> * jakfrost > >>>>> * jakfrost edit the mdadm primer article > >>>>> * jakfrost email pitch author for shell tuning and get them into > >>>>> drafting > >>>>> * ryanlerch > >>>>> * ryanlerch do image for mdadm article > >>>>> * ryanlerch edit/image/schedule K3s on Fedora IoT article for Monday > >>>>> Apr 15 > >>>>> * stickster > >>>>> * stickster email bkp to see about extending social network access > >>>>> * stickster edit newest HDYF article and publish 2019-04-12 > >>>>> * stickster edit/image for FFSend article for Fri 2019-Apr-19 > >>>>> * stickster email DVD article author to advise on status > >>>>> * stickster see if plugin for edit-flow is updated properly > >>>>> * **UNASSIGNED** > >>>>> * (none) > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> People Present (lines said) > >>>>> --------------------------- > >>>>> * stickster (109) > >>>>> * jakfrost (18) > >>>>> * ryanlerch (14) > >>>>> * zodbot (12) > >>>>> * gregbartholomew_ (11) > >>>>> * sdgathman (6) > >>>>> * pjones (2) > >>>>> * asamalik (0) > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> > >>>>> Generated by `MeetBot`_ 0.1.4 > >>>>> > >>>>> .. _`MeetBot`: http://wiki.debian.org/MeetBot > >>>>> > >>>> _______________________________________________ > >>>> Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > >>>> To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > >>>> Fedora Code of Conduct: https://getfedora.org/code-of-conduct.html > >>>> List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines > >>>> List Archives: https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > >> _______________________________________________ > >> Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > >> To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > >> Fedora Code of Conduct: https://getfedora.org/code-of-conduct.html > >> List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines > >> List Archives: https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > _______________________________________________ Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Fedora Code of Conduct: https://getfedora.org/code-of-conduct.html List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines List Archives: https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
