You are a sophisticated and expressive composer. You could post the lyrics/melody somewhere, perhaps someone on the list could sing them for you? You get a decent tone from your recorder. It has a plastic tone to me, though. Is it plastic? Makes me wonder how it would sound on a wooden instrument. Oleg Ivanenko wrote: > Stephen, you are felt this piece very precisely. I'm very glad to read > about your feelings. I had not expected this yet. So, I had succeed. > > "I Flying" born as song. I made a lyrics for it and even tried to sing > it but without success :( I'm not a singer unfortunately. Properly, I > can sing more simple songs but not this one. More songs from me at > ftp://freemusic-project.ru/Ash/ I should warn all songs very different > -- I hate similarity. > > You absolutely right about The Eagles and Hotel California :))) I > notice it too at early stages of creation and try to mask it. Sequence > of chords(especially at the beginning of piece) very similar but tune > completely different. > > And, You know, I have bad eyesight too :) > > 2009/11/2 Stephen Stubbs <theother1510@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>: >> >> ________________________________ >> >> Hi, all! >> >> I've recently finished long-awaited(for me) instrumental composition >> (http://www.archive.org/download/IFlying/Ash_Ya_Lechu_I_Flying_986.mp3) >> and need your opinions about it. If you please, tell me about my >> composition/arrangement/performance/mastering etc mistakes. Sorry for >> my English :) >> Hello Oleg. Your English is excellent. >> >> I've been listening to this piece over and over; that's not something that I >> usually do. "I Flying" is saying something, but I haven't yet figured out >> what it is saying. A very complex composition. Congratulations, Well Done! >> >> I think it's important to know a little background about the person >> reviewing your work, so that you know what their biases are. >> >> I'm a vocalist, coming from bass cleff, brass instrument school training >> (baritone, trombone, and tuba.) As a vocalist, I focus entirely on the >> words. As an ex-bass cleff brass player, my next focus is on the counter >> melody. My final focus is on the melody. I'm also sound oriented rather >> than visual oriented (I have bad eyesight.) >> >> There's another follower of this list who is most definitely visually >> oriented. I hope he will listen to this piece and give us his visual >> interpretation of the work. For now, here's my sound interpretation: >> >> The feel of this piece first had me thinking of Hotel California by The >> Eagles. Then it started moving into a feel of Stairway to Heaven by Led >> Zepplin. Then it shifted into something completely different, with the >> ending coming as a total surprise to me with that final guitar 'scream'. >> (One of the best reproductions of a human scream done with a guitar that >> I've ever heard.) >> >> As for the recorder in the piece, leave it in. It sets a feeling that the >> guitar picks up and elaborates on. I like the dialog between guitar and >> bass guitar, with the bass guitar picking up the feeling from the guitar at >> around 1:22. >> >> The guitar shifts into its own 'intense' feeling at 1:40. At 2:33 the >> recorder tries to regain control and calmness. But to no avail, as the >> guitar reasserts itself at 3:00 and then proceeds to take listener by the >> heart and jump off a cliff! >> >> As I said, 'I Flying' is telling a story--saying something. I wasn't >> exactly sure when I first heard it what the message was. But there is no >> question its message is something with very strong emotional impact. Your >> later comments about how your life had recently had sorrow in it is giving >> me clue. >> >> Please post more of your work. Thank you, >> Stephen >> >> > > > -- David gnome@xxxxxxxxxxxxx authenticity, honesty, community _______________________________________________ Linux-audio-user mailing list Linux-audio-user@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx http://lists.linuxaudio.org/mailman/listinfo/linux-audio-user
