Stephen, you are felt this piece very precisely. I'm very glad to read about your feelings. I had not expected this yet. So, I had succeed. "I Flying" born as song. I made a lyrics for it and even tried to sing it but without success :( I'm not a singer unfortunately. Properly, I can sing more simple songs but not this one. More songs from me at ftp://freemusic-project.ru/Ash/ I should warn all songs very different -- I hate similarity. You absolutely right about The Eagles and Hotel California :))) I notice it too at early stages of creation and try to mask it. Sequence of chords(especially at the beginning of piece) very similar but tune completely different. And, You know, I have bad eyesight too :) 2009/11/2 Stephen Stubbs <theother1510@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>: > > > ________________________________ > > Hi, all! > > I've recently finished long-awaited(for me) instrumental composition > (http://www.archive.org/download/IFlying/Ash_Ya_Lechu_I_Flying_986.mp3) > and need your opinions about it. If you please, tell me about my > composition/arrangement/performance/mastering etc mistakes. Sorry for > my English :) > Hello Oleg. Your English is excellent. > > I've been listening to this piece over and over; that's not something that I > usually do. "I Flying" is saying something, but I haven't yet figured out > what it is saying. A very complex composition. Congratulations, Well Done! > > I think it's important to know a little background about the person > reviewing your work, so that you know what their biases are. > > I'm a vocalist, coming from bass cleff, brass instrument school training > (baritone, trombone, and tuba.) As a vocalist, I focus entirely on the > words. As an ex-bass cleff brass player, my next focus is on the counter > melody. My final focus is on the melody. I'm also sound oriented rather > than visual oriented (I have bad eyesight.) > > There's another follower of this list who is most definitely visually > oriented. I hope he will listen to this piece and give us his visual > interpretation of the work. For now, here's my sound interpretation: > > The feel of this piece first had me thinking of Hotel California by The > Eagles. Then it started moving into a feel of Stairway to Heaven by Led > Zepplin. Then it shifted into something completely different, with the > ending coming as a total surprise to me with that final guitar 'scream'. > (One of the best reproductions of a human scream done with a guitar that > I've ever heard.) > > As for the recorder in the piece, leave it in. It sets a feeling that the > guitar picks up and elaborates on. I like the dialog between guitar and > bass guitar, with the bass guitar picking up the feeling from the guitar at > around 1:22. > > The guitar shifts into its own 'intense' feeling at 1:40. At 2:33 the > recorder tries to regain control and calmness. But to no avail, as the > guitar reasserts itself at 3:00 and then proceeds to take listener by the > heart and jump off a cliff! > > As I said, 'I Flying' is telling a story--saying something. I wasn't > exactly sure when I first heard it what the message was. But there is no > question its message is something with very strong emotional impact. Your > later comments about how your life had recently had sorrow in it is giving > me clue. > > Please post more of your work. Thank you, > Stephen > > -- Truly yours, Oleg Ivanenko aka Ash [if it wasn't so sad, it would be funny] _______________________________________________ Linux-audio-user mailing list Linux-audio-user@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx http://lists.linuxaudio.org/mailman/listinfo/linux-audio-user
