Dave, thank you very much for your opinions and proposals. About "flute/piccolo/whistle instrument" - it was cheap made-in-china recorder and may be it was some lightweight for this piece, but I try to learn for play on this instrument and try to understand it's applicability in future pieces. About coda - ooh... You pretty right. I producing/performing this piece and anything else from December, 2007(personal troubles, life changes and so on) and I just feel done up. I must pass it on. How do You thinking I should to change "dynamics/balance"? 2009/11/1 Dave Phillips <dlphillips@xxxxxxxxxx>: > Oleg Ivanenko wrote: >> >> I've recently finished long-awaited(for me) instrumental composition >> (http://www.archive.org/download/IFlying/Ash_Ya_Lechu_I_Flying_986.mp3) >> and need your opinions about it. If you please, tell me about my >> composition/arrangement/performance/mastering etc mistakes. >> >> > > Hi Oleg, > > A few comments: > > The flute/piccolo/whistle instrument doesn't add anything structurally. The > piece is clearly focused on the guitar sounds, I think I'd like it better if > the flute sound was replaced by another guitar part. > > I wanted to hear some more significant crescendi. I think you could vary the > surface of the piece by playing with dynamics more. (I was going to say > "playing with dynamic curves" but I don't want to tempt my fellow LAUyers). > > The individual parts are well-composed and nicely performed. Some more > touches in the dynamics and balances might give it a little more intensity. > Btw, I listened to it on headphones, perhaps my critique will change when I > can play it on the main speakers here. > > Best, > > dp > > -- Truly yours, Oleg Ivanenko aka Ash [if it wasn't so sad, it would be funny] _______________________________________________ Linux-audio-user mailing list Linux-audio-user@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx http://lists.linuxaudio.org/mailman/listinfo/linux-audio-user
