On Tue, Oct 03, 2006 at 10:37:48PM +0700, Patrick Shirkey wrote: > > > >http://www.archive.org/details/theres_a_girl > That's an interesting take on the topic. > > - The wind is a nice touch. > > - The timbre and rhythm of the vocal track fits very nicely. Thanks :) > - Your English passes the basic test of not obviously sounding like a > second language. Which is something that I have found ruins many > otherwise well crafted Amatuer/Semi-pro tracks. Cool. Havn't actualy spoken english since several years, but I listened to drew's spoken words closely and after dozens of takes ... :) > - I found myself wanting the vocal to start about 1 minute into the track. > > My suggestion is to bring in the vocal track earlier and loop it a > couple more times with more effects/layering/remixing/dubbing each time > to really highlight and emphasize the tormented, cynical and slightly > submissive nature of the lyrics. I considered looping it 3 or 4 times, but was worried it could only wear out. The last line of the text justs asks for an end. But if I ever toch this again, I will take your suggestion into account. -- Thorsten Wilms
