I agree with you Sri!
It's worth noting that during the 2 last IETF meetings, we got the
impression that the draft needs just few adjustments. I think that the
ND issues should be tackled in a seperated document.
On Fri, Apr 12, 2019, 15:39 Sri Gundavelli (sgundave)
<sgundave@xxxxxxxxx <mailto:sgundave@xxxxxxxxx>> wrote:
I am not following these discussions. From my point of view, many
of the discussions are totally out of scope for this document.
Some one needs to moderate these discussions.
Sri
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Date: Friday, April 12, 2019 at 7:34 AM
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Subject: Re: [ipwave] Intdir early review of
draft-ietf-ipwave-ipv6-over-80211ocb-34
Hello Pascal,
I seconded Akex and would like to suggest you to add the missing
text in the draft.
Best regards
Nabil
On Mon, Apr 8, 2019, 14:01 Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
<pthubert@xxxxxxxxx <mailto:pthubert@xxxxxxxxx>> wrote:
Hello Nabil.____
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You will get a number of IESG reviews as part of the submission
process, one per area. This is just a beginning…____
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Cheers,____
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Pascal____
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*Subject:* Re: Intdir early review of
draft-ietf-ipwave-ipv6-over-80211ocb-34____
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Yes definitely Alex....____
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There have been many reviews until now. This should be a late or
final review.____
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On Mon, Apr 8, 2019, 10:01 Alexandre Petrescu
<alexandre.petrescu@xxxxxxxxx
<mailto:alexandre.petrescu@xxxxxxxxx>> wrote:____
As a note: please improve the title of this.____
It is not an early review.____
It is a late review.____
There have been several reviews of this document until here,
and two shepherd reviews.____
Alex____
Le 04/03/2019 à 12:24, Pascal Thubert a écrit :____
Reviewer: Pascal Thubert____
Review result: Not Ready____
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Reviewer: Pascal Thubert____
Review result: Not ready. Need to clarify IEEE relationship, IOW which SDO____
defines the use of L2 fields, what this spec enforces vs. recognizes as being____
used that way based on IEEE work. The use of IPv6 ND requires a lot more____
thoughts, recommendation to use 6LoWPAN ND. The definition of a subnet is____
unclear. It seems that RSUs would have prefixes but that is not discussed.____
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I am an assigned INT and IOT directorates reviewer for <____
draft-ietf-ipwave-ipv6-over-80211ocb-34 >. These comments were written____
primarily for the benefit of the Internet Area Directors. Document editors and____
shepherd(s) should treat these comments just like they would treat comments____
from any other IETF contributors and resolve them along with any other Last____
Call comments that have been received. For more details on the INT Directorate,____
seehttps://datatracker.ietf.org/group/intdir/about/____
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Majors issues____
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o Exceptions due to different operation of IPv6 network layer on____
802.11 than on Ethernet.____
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“____
Is this doc scoped to OCB or 802.11 in general? Is there an expectation that an____
implementer of IPv6 over Wi-Fi refers to this doc? Spelled as above, it seems____
that you are defining the LLC. Figure 1 shows the proposed adaptation layer as____
IEEE LLC work. Who defines those fields, IETF or IEEE, or mixed? Who defines____
their use? If this spec defines a new LLC header (vs. how to use an IEEE field)____
then it should be very clear, and the newly defined fields should be isolated____
from IEEE fields.____
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The IPv6 packet transmitted on 802.11-OCB MUST be immediately____
preceded by a Logical Link Control (LLC) header and an 802.11 header.____
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"____
Is there anything new or specific to OCB vs. classical 802.11 operations?____
If/when this is echoing the IEEE specs then this text should not use uppercase____
but say something like: 'Per IEEE Std 802.11, the IPv6 packet transmitted on____
802.11-OCB is immediately preceded by a Logical Link Control (LLC) header and____
an 802.11 header ...'____
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different things? Why define both?____
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" An 'adaptation' layer is inserted between a MAC layer and the____
Networking layer. This is used to transform some parameters between____
their form expected by the IP stack and the form provided by the MAC____
layer.____
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Is this different from what an AP does when it bridges Wi-Fi to Ethernet? Is____
this IETF business?____
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The Receiver and Transmitter Address fields in the 802.11 header MUST____
contain the same values as the Destination and the Source Address____
fields in the Ethernet II Header, respectively.____
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Same, this is IEEE game isn't it?____
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Solutions for these problems SHOULD____
consider the OCB mode of operation.____
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This is not specific enough to be actionable. I suggest to remove this sentence.____
It would be of interest for the people defining those solutions to understand____
the specific needs of OCB vs. Wi Fi, but I do not see text about that.____
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The method of forming IIDs____
described in section 4 of [RFC2464] MAY be used during transition____
time.____
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Contradicts section 4.3 that says____
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Among these types of____
addresses only the IPv6 link-local addresses MAY be formed using an____
EUI-64 identifier.____
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This____
subnet MUST use at least the link-local prefix fe80::/10 and the____
interfaces MUST be assigned IPv6 addresses of type link-local.____
"____
If this is conforming IPv6 then the MUST is not needed.____
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"____
A subnet is formed by the external 802.11-OCB interfaces of vehicles____
that are in close range (not by their in-vehicle interfaces).____
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Is the definition transitive? Do we really get a subnet?____
A is close to B who is close to C .... to Z, makes Paris one subnet! Are you____
talking about a link, rather?____
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The Neighbor Discovery protocol (ND) [RFC4861] MUST be used over____
802.11-OCB links.____
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IPv6 ND is not suited for a non-broadcast network. How does DAD work?____
Maybe you could consider RFC 6775 / RFC 8505 instead.____
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In the moment the MAC address is changed____
on an 802.11-OCB interface all the Interface Identifiers of IPv6____
addresses assigned to that interface MUST change.____
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Why is that? This is unexpected, and hopefully wrong.____
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Minor issues____
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" OCB (outside the context of a basic service set - BSS): A mode of____
operation in which a STA is not a member of a BSS and does not____
utilize IEEE Std 802.11 authentication, association, or data____
confidentiality.____
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802.11-OCB: mode specified in IEEE Std 802.11-2016 when the MIB____
attribute dot11OCBActivited is true. Note: compliance with standards____
and regulations set in different countries when using the 5.9GHz____
frequency band is required.____
"____
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Are these 2 different things?____
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"____
Among these types of____
addresses only the IPv6 link-local addresses MAY be formed using an____
EUI-64 identifier.____
"____
This text should not be in a LL specific section since it deals with the other____
addresses. Maybe rename the section to "addressing" or something?____
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For privacy, the link-local address MAY be formed according to the____
mechanisms described in Section 5.2.____
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The MAY is not helpful. I suggest to remove the sentence that does not bring____
value vs. 5.2____
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Could you make sections 4.3 and 4.5 contiguous?____
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If semantically____
opaque Interface Identifiers are needed, a potential method for____
generating semantically opaque Interface Identifiers with IPv6____
Stateless Address Autoconfiguration is given in [RFC7217]..____
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Semantically opaque Interface Identifiers, instead of meaningful____
Interface Identifiers derived from a valid and meaningful MAC address____
([RFC2464], section 4), MAY be needed in order to avoid certain____
privacy risks.____
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...____
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In order to avoid these risks, opaque Interface Identifiers MAY be____
formed according to rules described in [RFC7217]. These opaque____
Interface Identifiers are formed starting from identifiers different____
than the MAC addresses, and from cryptographically strong material.____
Thus, privacy sensitive information is absent from Interface IDs, and____
it is impossible to calculate the initial value from which the____
Interface ID was calculated.____
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Duplicate and mis ordered text, isn't it?____
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" For this reason, an attacker may realize many____
attacks on privacy.____
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Do we attack privacy? Maybe say that privacy is a real concern, and maybe move____
that text to security section?____
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The way Interface Identifiers are used MAY involve risks to privacy,____
as described in Section 5.1.____
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Also duplicate____
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Nits____
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IP packets MUST be transmitted over 802.11-OCB media as QoS Data____
frames whose format is specified in IEEE Std 802.11.____
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Please add link to the reference____
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" the 802.11 hidden node"____
Do not use 802.11 standalone (multiple occurrences).____
=> "the IEEE Std. 802.11 [ ref ] hidden node", or just "the hidden terminal".____
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BCP 14 text:____
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Suggest to use this text:____
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The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",____
"SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "NOT RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and____
"OPTIONAL" in this document are to be interpreted as described in____
https://tools.ietf.org/html/bcp14 https://tools.ietf.org/html/bcp14____
[https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc2119][RFC8174] when, and only when, they____
appear in all capitals, as shown here.____
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“____
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All the best____
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Pascal____
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