Hi Tom, FWIW, an updated version which takes into account your review is available online. The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/ A diff from the previous version is available at: https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-15 Cheers, Med > -----Message d'origine----- > De : mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx [mailto:mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx] > Envoyé : mardi 20 février 2018 14:34 > À : tom p. > Cc : softwires@xxxxxxxx; draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang@xxxxxxxx; softwire- > chairs@xxxxxxxx; ianfarrer@xxxxxxx; terry.manderson@xxxxxxxxx; ietf@xxxxxxxx > Objet : RE: Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> (A YANG Data > Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)) to Proposed Standard > > Hi Tom, > > Thank you for the review and comments. > > Please see inline. > > Cheers, > Med > > > -----Message d'origine----- > > De : tom p. [mailto:daedulus@xxxxxxxxxxxxx] > > Envoyé : mardi 20 février 2018 12:07 > > À : ietf@xxxxxxxx > > Cc : softwires@xxxxxxxx; draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang@xxxxxxxx; > softwire- > > chairs@xxxxxxxx; ianfarrer@xxxxxxx; terry.manderson@xxxxxxxxx > > Objet : Re: Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> (A YANG > Data > > Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)) to Proposed Standard > > > > Some minor, mostly administrative, details > > > > - The note to the RFC Editor asking them to replace XXXX is good. I > > suggest another asking them to update the dates in the file and > > revision clauses of the YANG module with the date of publication.. > > [Med] Fixed in my local copy. > > > > > - Copyright is 2017 > > [Med] Updated to 2018 in my local copy. > > > > > - the YANG module has six imports but no reference to where they can be > > found. I suggest adding a reference clause to each import, as in e.g. > > draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model, > > [Med] Happily. Done. > > > and, since the reference clause cannot > > contain a XML style reference to the Reference section of the I-D, a > > further mention of these I-D/RFC in the body of the I-D, again as in > > e.g. > > draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model > > [Med] Given that almost all these pointers are already mentioned in the core > text, I added only a sentence to refer to RFC7224. > > > > > - RFC7223 now has a bis version which I think you should use as it is > > the NMDA version - this might affect your augments, I have not delved > > into that yet. > > [Med] Now that the 7223bis is in the RFC Editor queue, I updated the text. > > > > > - RFC5246 is being obsoleted and ... perhaps not:-) > > [Med] Yeah, but RFC5246 is part of the recommended security text for YANG > modules (https://trac.ietf.org/trac/ops/wiki/yang-security-guidelines). > RFC5246 will be maintained till that reco is updated. > > > > > - RFC 6536 is being revised and will soon be in IETF Last Call > > [Med] Actually, it will be published as RFC8341. I updated the text > accordingly. > > > > > Tom Petch > > > > ----- Original Message ----- > > From: "The IESG" <iesg-secretary@xxxxxxxx> > > Sent: Monday, February 12, 2018 2:28 PM > > > > > > > > > > The IESG has received a request from the Softwires WG (softwire) to > > consider > > > the following document: - 'A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite > > (DS-Lite)' > > > <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> as Proposed Standard > > > > > > The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits > > final > > > comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the > > > ietf@xxxxxxxx mailing lists by 2018-02-26. Exceptionally, comments may > > be > > > sent to iesg@xxxxxxxx instead. In either case, please retain the > > beginning of > > > the Subject line to allow automated sorting. > > > > > > Abstract > > > > > > > > > This document defines a YANG module for the DS-Lite Address Family > > > Transition Router (AFTR) and Basic Bridging BroadBand (B4) > > elements. > > > > > > Editorial Note (To be removed by RFC Editor) > > > > > > Please update these statements with the RFC number to be assigned > > to > > > this document: > > > > > > o "This version of this YANG module is part of RFC XXXX;" > > > > > > o "RFC XXXX: A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)"; > > > > > > o "reference: RFC XXXX" > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > The file can be obtained via > > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/ > > > > > > IESG discussion can be tracked via > > > > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/ballot/ > > > > > > > > > No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D. > > > > > > > > > The document contains these normative downward references. > > > See RFC 3967 for additional information: > > > draft-ietf-opsawg-nat-yang: A YANG Module for Network Address > > Translation (NAT) (None - IETF stream) > > > > > > > > >
