Hi, Adrian.
Two points:
- I don't see an explanation of northbound in -05.
- In the new text at the end of s2.1.2 s/whole the controllers/while the controllers/
Otherwise, the extra text and changes look helpful.
Best wshes,
Elwyn
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From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
Date: 04/09/2017 10:47 (GMT+00:00)
To: 'Elwyn Davies' <elwynd@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>, gen-art@xxxxxxxx
Cc: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control.all@xxxxxxxx, ietf@xxxxxxxx, teas@xxxxxxxx
Subject: RE: [Teas] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04
Clarified in the next revision.
Adrian
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> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> Document: draft-ietf-teas-pce-central-control-04
> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review Date: 2017-08-28
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-08-24
> IESG Telechat date: 2017-08-31
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> Summary: Thanks for addressing my Last Call comments on -03. The new version
> is ready with one introduced nit. Also I am still of the abstract is somewhat
> overlong.
>
> Nit:
> s6, para 2: The SDN term 'northbound' has appeared in the new version. Needs
> brief explanation.
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