> On Nov 3, 2014, at 10:58, Dearlove, Christopher (UK) <chris.dearlove@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Adrian Farrel >> AB >>> 2- The draft mentions in the introduction:- This modification is >>> strictly optional, >>> >>> [AB] the reviewer suggests to include in the ID-Abstract that this >>> standard is optional. It is not enough to only mention in the >>> introduction such important information. > >> Good point. > > The abstract does actually say "to permit", which indicates this is not mandatory. But we can add the word optional to that. Hm, after having re-read the abstract, I am not actually sure that adding the word “optional” brings you anything: pretty much the whole last paragraph states that as optional, as Chris writes, “…to permit…” and then “this allows…” etc. I believe that the abstract does what it is supposed to do, i.e., calls out the documents that it updates and briefly summarizes the update. I do not see any overwhelming reason to stuff more words into it. > Regarding the title, there's a usual tradeoff between brevity (and it's already not brief) and detail. I wouldn't add the suggests "based on link quality" as that really adds nothing useful (it's not an optimisation based on link quality, it's an optimisation to remove a side-effect of the use of link quality). To be a useful lengthening of the title, it would, I think, have to mention something about the two hop neighbourhood. I haven't consulted with my co-author, but my proposal would be to see if anyone on the IESG has a problem with the title as-is. Agree 100% with Chris here. Thomas > > -- > Christopher Dearlove > Senior Principal Engineer, Information Assurance Group > Communications, Networks and Image Analysis Capability > BAE Systems Advanced Technology Centre > West Hanningfield Road, Great Baddow, Chelmsford, CM2 8HN, UK > Tel: +44 1245 242194 | Fax: +44 1245 242124 > chris.dearlove@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx | http://www.baesystems.com > > BAE Systems (Operations) Limited > Registered Office: Warwick House, PO Box 87, Farnborough Aerospace Centre, Farnborough, Hants, GU14 6YU, UK > Registered in England & Wales No: 1996687 > ******************************************************************** > This email and any attachments are confidential to the intended > recipient and may also be privileged. If you are not the intended > recipient please delete it from your system and notify the sender. > You should not copy it or use it for any purpose nor disclose or > distribute its contents to any other person. > ********************************************************************