I think the text you SM and Russ discussed for the "global" issue is fine, and supported by the discussion. (Although I have to say, the word "whole" later in that section already did it for me; I did not consider the fix critical. But I think the document is better with the fix.) > 3. IETF participants devise solutions for the global Internet that > meet the needs of diverse technical and operational environments. I'm also happy to have the IPR rules referenced, again as discussed by you SM and Russ and supported by discussion. > Here is text which can be inserted in the last paragraph of Section 2: > > We follow the intellectual property guidelines outlined in BCP 79. > IETF participants read the relevant Internet-Drafts … And I think the suggestion from Dave was also worthwhile and supported by discussion: > ... All participants, particularly those with English as a first > language, attempt to accommodate the needs of other participants > by communicating clearly, including speaking slowly and limiting > the use of slang. … Finally, you should use data tracker URLs as Russ suggested. I do think though that for the rest, we are beyond the stage where additional editing provides useful results. I think SM's text is good, easily understandable, and ready to go. Jari