Hi Dave, Sorry for a late reply addressing your comments. Please, see inline. Thanks, Nabil From: "Black, David" <david.black@xxxxxxx> Date: Monday, August 20, 2012 8:57 PM To: "dinmohan@xxxxxxxxxxx" <dinmohan@xxxxxxxxxxx>, "Bitar, Nabil N" <nabil.n.bitar@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>, Sagessi <sajassi@xxxxxxxxx>, "gen-art@xxxxxxxx" <gen-art@xxxxxxxx> Cc: "Black, David" <david.black@xxxxxxx>, "pwe3@xxxxxxxx" <pwe3@xxxxxxxx>, "ietf@xxxxxxxx" <ietf@xxxxxxxx> Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06 Reviewer: David L. Black Review Date: August 20, 2012 IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. <NB> Thanks.
This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires, including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior. The draft is generally in good shape. I found a few minor nits.
1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to be expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the draft listing all of them would be helpful. <NB> Done. <NB> Thanks. Done.
3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document:
[MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006. [MEF16]
"Ethernet Local Management Interface", Metro Ethernet Forum Technical
Specification MEF16, January 2006. <NB> changed it to :
4) idnits 2.12.13 did not like the pagination:
== The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22 <NB> That will be fixed. Thanks, --David ---------------------------------------------------- David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 david.black@xxxxxxx Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 ---------------------------------------------------- |