Hi Kathleen and Matthew, Thank you for your review and comment. I have updated the draft according to most of your comments. -----Original Message----- From: kathleen.moriarty@xxxxxxx [mailto:kathleen.moriarty@xxxxxxx] Sent: Monday, June 27, 2011 9:09 PM To: gen-art@xxxxxxxx; draft-li-pwe3-ms-pw-pon.all@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx; ietf@xxxxxxxx Cc: Lihongyu(Hongyu); Robin Zheng(Ruobin); adrian.farrel@xxxxxxxxxx Subject: GEN-ART review for draft-li-pwe3-ms-pw-pon-03 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-li-pwe3-ms-pw-pon-03 Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: June 27, 2011 IETF LC End Date: IESG Telechat date: June 28, 2011 Summary: This document is ready with nits. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: The acronym PW is used in the abstract and is not defined until the introduction. Please fix. Paragraph 7 of the introduction, last sentence: Change from "Besides coding and maintenance of these new protocols, a much powerful CPU and more memory are also necessary for them to run smoothly." To: "Besides coding and maintenance of these new protocols, a much more powerful CPU and more memory are also necessary for them to run smoothly." If you do not want to repeat the word more, consider the word additional to replace the second instance of more. Last paragraph of Section 4: Consider changing from: "OMCI supports the configuration of a number of PW types including TDM, ATM, and Ethernet, and the protocol can also be used to allow the ONU to notify the OLT of the status of the AC." To: "OMCI supports the configuration of a number of PW types including TDM, ATM, and Ethernet. The protocol can also be used to allow the ONU to notify the OLT of the status of the AC." _______________________________________________ Ietf mailing list Ietf@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ietf