I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-isms-transport-security-model-12
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2009-04-10
IETF LC End Date: 2009-04-15
IESG Telechat date: (if known)
Summary:
This draft is ready for publication as a proposed standard. I have a
few nit comments, attention to which might improve the document.
Major issues:
None
Minor issues:
None
Nits/editorial comments:
--Section 2.3.1, second paragraph
It's not clear to me from context if the "*" is a placeholder or a
footnote reference.
--Section 2.3.2
Can you provide a reference for the "User-based Security Model"?
-- Section 4.2, first two paragraphs
I'm not sure why the above two paragraphs are numbered--they don't
seem to represent an ordered sequence.
-- section 9, SMI assignment:
Can you give a URL to the mib-2 registry?
-- Appendix A, multiple editor notes concerning port for SNMP over SSH.
I gather this is port is not already assigned, nor is it assigned by
this document. Can you include a reference to where it is being
assigned?
-- Appendices C and D:
Are these to be removed?
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