[Last-Call] Re: [art] [Anima] Artart telechat review of draft-ietf-anima-jws-voucher-14

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Makes sense. I was guessing at whether manufacturer was plural or singlular. I guessed plural because it sounded like MASA signs for multiple manufacturers, and it was describing  the overall set of those relationships.

-Jim

On 30 Nov 2024, at 15:05, William Atwood wrote:

> Actually, since a specific MASA signs a specific pledge on behalf of a single manufacturer, the use of "manufacturer's" is correct.  However, it would be clearer if "the" were inserted before "manufacturer's".
>
>   Bill
>
> On 11/30/2024 5:37 PM, Jim Fenton via Datatracker wrote:
>> Attention This email originates from outside the concordia.ca domain. // Ce courriel provient de l'extérieur du domaine de concordia.ca
>>
>> Reviewer: Jim Fenton
>> Review result: Ready with Nits
>>
>> I am the designated artart reviewer for this draft.
>>
>> Thanks for addressing all of my comments on -12. They are all addressed in the
>> text with the exception of my question on why this is separate from
>> ietf-anima-rfc3866bis, which was answered on the mailing list. This draft is
>> ready to go with the exception of a few tiny editorial nits:
>>
>> Section 1, paragraph 1 move (BRSKI) and (SZTP) inside the quotes since that is
>> part of the titles of the RFCs.
>>
>> Section 1, paragraph 3 "as enhancement of" -> "as an enhancement of"
>>
>> Section 2, definition of voucher: "statement from Manufacturer" -> "statement
>> from a Manufacturer"
>>
>> Section 2, definition of MASA: manufacturer's -> manufacturers'
>>
>>
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