Hello Pascal,
Thanks, the proposed update is ok for me.
Jiankang Yao
From: Pascal ThubertDate: 2024-10-11 17:24To: Jiankang YaoSubject: [Last-Call] Re: Artart last call review of draft-ietf-raw-technologies-10Hello JiankangMany thanks for your review!Please see below:Le mar. 10 sept. 2024 à 13:58, Jiankang Yao via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> a écrit :Reviewer: Jiankang Yao
Review result: Almost Ready
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Document: draft-ietf-raw-technologies-10
Reviewer: Jiankang Yao
Review Date: 2024-09-10
Summary: Almost Ready for publication.
This document presents a series of recent reliable and available wireless
technology evolutions. It is very useful. The document is very long, and there
still have some nits. It needs further improvments.
One suggestion:
Every section in sections 4, 5, 6 and 7 has the subsection"summary".
How about adding a new section "summary" which tries to summarize all sections
from 4 to 7?
Variations of this proposal were suggested during this round of review. To keep the document structure I tend to like a bit better Mallory's idea to push the summary section up in the protocol section.Does that work for you?Again, many thanks;PascalBest Regards
Jiankang Yao
--Pascal
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