Hello Shivan
many thanks for your review!
please see below:
Le jeu. 19 sept. 2024 à 09:45, Shivan Sahib via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> a écrit :
Reviewer: Shivan Sahib
Review result: Has Issues
I have reviewed draft-ietf-raw-technologies-10 document as part of the security
directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by
the IESG. These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the security
area directors. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just
like any other last call comments.
The summary of the review is Ready with issues.
The document is an Informational draft that doesn't define any new behaviour
and instead simply provides an overview of reliable and available wireless
technology developments. The current "Security Considerations" section refers
readers to the individual security concerns of each technology. While the
document doesn't introduce any new security considerations, I do think
discussing the broader security considerations with these technologies would be
very useful to the reader of this document and the omission seems surprising. I
will leave it up to the ADs to see if this is something they want to block on.
OK. Not sure what to say. Security analysis of the technologies was not in scope.
added in the intro:
"
The IETF specifications referenced herein each provide their own Security Considerations,
and lower layer technologies provide their own security at Layer-2; a security study of the
technologies is explicitly not in scope.
"
Apart from that, some minor grammatical and text improvement issues:
1. Introduction
s/A runtime distributed Path/a runtime distributed Path
fixed
2. Section 4.1
The first paragraph of Section 4.1 reads like promotional material for IEEE,
which seems unnecessary for an IETF document. Similarly, the descriptions of
Wi-Fi Alliance and Avnu Alliance in this section also seem promotional.
removed
3. Section 5.2.2.1.2:
s/etc.../etc.
fixed.
I pushed the proposed diffs in github. Let us see with the AD about the security section.
again many thanks, Shivan!
Pascal
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