Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review result: Ready with Issues I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-raw-technologies-?? Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review Date: 2024-10-07 IETF LC End Date: 2024-09-18 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: This document is a very useful informational text about the requirements of reliability and availability for various uses in networks connected with wireless technologies. Major issues: The introduction could make it clearer to the reader how the technologies were chosen, if it is a complete set at the time of writing, and other revisions that indicate more clearly the purpose. I also find the final paragraph of the introduction more helpful about the document's contents than the current abstract: This document browses the short and middle range radio technologies that are suitable to provide a DetNet/RAW service over, presents the characteristics that RAW may leverage, and explores the applicability of the technologies to carry deterministic flows. The studied technologies are Wi-Fi 6/7, TimeSlotted Channel Hopping (TSCH), 3GPP 5G, and L-band Digital Aeronautical Communications System (LDACS). Minor issues: Other reviewers have also noted the slightly awkward "summary" subsection at the end of each section and my suggested approach might be to include this as the *first* paragraph for each section, before the subsections begin, eg: 4. IEEE 802.11 [Summary paragraph without subsection heading] 4.1. Provenance and Documents ... Nits/editorial comments: (none). -- last-call mailing list -- last-call@xxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to last-call-leave@xxxxxxxx
