Hi Tero, The proposed changes are now implemented in a public version. The changes can be tracked here: https://author-tools.ietf.org/iddiff?url2=draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit-16/ Cheers, Med > -----Message d'origine----- > De : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET > Envoyé : mercredi 4 septembre 2024 11:48 > À : 'Tero Kivinen' <kivinen@xxxxxx> > Cc : secdir@xxxxxxxx; draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment- > circuit.all@xxxxxxxx; last-call@xxxxxxxx; opsawg@xxxxxxxx > Objet : RE: Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-teas- > attachment-circuit-15 > > Hi Tero, > > I made changes to follow your suggestion when appropriate. Please > use the same diff to track the changes. Thanks. > > Cheers, > Med > > > -----Message d'origine----- > > De : Tero Kivinen <kivinen@xxxxxx> > > Envoyé : mercredi 4 septembre 2024 02:43 À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed > > INNOV/NET <mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx> Cc : secdir@xxxxxxxx; > > draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment- > > circuit.all@xxxxxxxx; last-call@xxxxxxxx; opsawg@xxxxxxxx > Objet : RE: > > Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-teas- > > attachment-circuit-15 > > > > > > mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx writes: > > > > 1.1. Scope and Intended Use > > > > > > > > Connectivity services are provided by networks to > > customers via > > > > dedicated terminating points, such as Service Functions > > (SFs) > > > > [RFC****], Customer Edges (CEs), peer Autonomous System > > Border > > > > ... > > > > This document adheres to the definition of an Attachment > > Circuit > > > > as > > > > provided in Section 1.2 of [RFC****], especially: > > > > ... > > > > > > > > For people who are not familiar of all mappings from the > > random RFC > > > > numbers to titles of the RFCs it would be better to make > sure > > that > > > > each any RFC number is referenced you also expand the short > > title > > > > for the document. > > > > > > [Med] I still think this is a matter of editing taste. The > > reference > > > list has the full details to cross check if needed. > > > > But it should be matter of reading test, not for editing taste. > > We should be trying to write the documents to be easy to read > and > > understand, not to be easy to edit... > > > > Google gives also same answers. While reading this draft I had > to > > google up the RFC numbers quite a lot of times, and had to do > it > > multiple times for some RFCs, as I just do NOT want to learn > mapping > > from RFC number to title for all RFCs. > > > > If you provide the titles for the RFC numbers that makes it > much > > easier for the reader who is new to the area, or not completely > > familiar with the area to read and follow the text. People who > are > > familiar with the area will simply skip those few words if they > > already have learned that specific RFC number to title mapping. > > > > If this document is one of those documents where it is expected > that > > writers of the document are more numerous than readers, meaning > the > > editing taste is more important than making it readable, then I > think > > we should not bother publishing this as RFC at all. > > -- > > kivinen@xxxxxx ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. Merci. This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged information that may be protected by law; they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete this message and its attachments. As emails may be altered, Orange is not liable for messages that have been modified, changed or falsified. Thank you. -- last-call mailing list -- last-call@xxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to last-call-leave@xxxxxxxx
