Reese, thank you for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot for this document. Lars > On Nov 17, 2022, at 03:23, Reese Enghardt via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Reviewer: Reese Enghardt > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-acme-subdomains-04 > Reviewer: Reese Enghardt > Review Date: 2022-11-16 > IETF LC End Date: 2022-11-21 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: The document is well-written, clear, and to the point. I only found a > few nits with opportunities for clarification. > > Major issues: None. > > Minor issues: > > Section 2: > > " Fully-Qualified Domain Name (FQDN): This is often just a clear way > of saying the same thing as "domain name of a node", as outlined > above. However, the term is ambiguous." > > These two sentences appear to contradict each other - Is the term clear or > ambiguous? I suggest removing the word "clear" to simply state how the term is > commonly used, and then point out the ambiguity. > > Section 3: > > "6. server replies with an updated order object […]" > > Is this updated order object similar to the "authorization" objects? > When it says "authorizations" in step 2, are these also objects? > I suggest defining the term "object", e.g., in Section 2, and then > double-checking that this term is applied consistency in the document. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Section 4.3: > > "If the client is unable to fulfill authorizations against parent domain" > -> "If the client is unable to fulfill authorizations against a parent domain" > > > > -- > last-call mailing list > last-call@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
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