Thanks for this review, Russ. —John > On Sep 8, 2022, at 5:01 PM, Russ Housley via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote: > > [External Email. Be cautious of content] > > > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review result: Ready > > I reviewed this document as part of the Security Directorate's ongoing > effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG. These > comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Security Area > Directors. Document authors, document editors, and WG chairs should > treat these comments just like any other IETF Last Call comments. > > Document: draft-ietf-raw-ldacs-12 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2022-09-08 > IETF LC End Date: 2022-04-04 > IESG Telechat date: 2022-04-21 > > This document has already been through IETF Last Call, and it has > already appeared in one IESG Telechat. The document has been revised. > As a result, this review focuses on the things that changed since the > last time that this document appeared on the IESG Telechat agenda. > > > Summary: Ready > > > Major Concerns: None > > > Minor Concerns: None > > > Nits: > > Section 1: I found the wording of the sixth paragraph awkward. > I suggest: > > This document provides information to the IETF community about the > aviation industry transition of flight guidance systems from analog > to digital, provides context for LDACS relative to related IETF > activities [I-D.haindl-lisp-gb-atn], and seeks expertise on reliably > of IPv6 over LDACS for step (1). This document does not intend to > advance LDACS as an IETF standards-track document. > > Section 4: s/LDACS testbeds and/LDACS, and/ > > Section 7.3.3: s/defined, however the/defined; however, the/ > > Section 9.7: s/RFC 9099/[RFC9099]/ > > > -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
