tsvwg,
We have posted a new rev of draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id-28 following the
review below by Bernard Aboba as Apps Area Directorate reviewer.
Thank you again, Bernard.
Summary of changes.
* All changes were editorial in nature.
* No changes were made to normative text nor to any technical descriptions.
* The full diff can be accessed from the datatracker:
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id-28.txt
* The main changes were to:
- the abstract
- the intro (§1.)
- the problem description (§1.1)
- sections 2 and 3 were switched round because the old section 3 was
the basis of a document roadmap, so it was moved earlier, and expanded a
little to fully map out the document and closely related docs.
(the diff cannot show changes to a moved section, but you can see
which para's were added, if you want to check)
* Numerous other minor editorial changes.
Bob
On 05/08/2022 15:34, Bob Briscoe wrote:
Bernard,
Thank you again. I also added you to the Acknowledgements section
after I temporarily uploaded the diff.
I will hold back from posting a new rev until early next week, to give
my co-author a chance to check it over.
Bob
On 05/08/2022 01:59, Bernard Aboba wrote:
Bob --
Thanks for the thoughtful and thorough response to my review. I have
gone
through the changes you suggest, and they look good to me.
On Thu, Aug 4, 2022 at 4:57 PM Bob Briscoe <ietf@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
Bernard,
Thank you for taking the time to produce this extremely thorough
review.
Pls see [BB] inline;
You will need an HTML email reader for the diffs in this email.
Alternatively, I've temporarily uploaded a side-by-side diff here:
https://bobbriscoe.net/tmp/draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id-28a-DIFF-27.html
On 30/07/2022 00:51, Bernard Aboba via Datatracker wrote:
Reviewer: Bernard Aboba
Review result: On the Right Track
Here are my review comments. I believe this is quite an important
document, so
that making the reasoning as clear as possible is important.
Unfortunately,
the writing and overall organization makes the document hard to
follow. If the
authors are open to it, I'd be willing to invest more time to help
get it into
shape.
[BB] Thank you. You have already obviously sunk considerable time
into it
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