Francis, thank you for your review. I have entered a Discuss ballot for this document based on my own review. Lars > On 2021-8-19, at 19:00, Francis Dupont via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote: > > > Review is partially done. Another assignment may be needed to complete it. > > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc793bis-24 > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 2021-08-18 > IETF LC End Date: 2021-08-02 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: Ready with Nits > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Only editorial comments: there are a lot of inconsistencies on US/UK spelling > for instance acknowledgment vs acknowledgement, or e.g., vs e.g.. These should > be addressed by the RFC Ediror. Note there is an i.e, (vs correct i.e.,) in > 3.8.6.2.1. page 47. > > I did not fully verify the technical details mainly because I review I-Ds in > public transports so without the whole collection of merged RFCs and errata. > In fact I only checked the figure 5 section 3.3.2 page 17 because an arrow > missed from it in the original RFC: this is addressed by the note 2 (I > compared with the fixed state transition diagram of the TCP/IP Illustrated > volume 2). > > There is a small note for the IESG in section 5 page 92 in the very last > paragraph about a PERPASS/privacy review. > > Regards > > > _______________________________________________ > tcpm mailing list > tcpm@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/tcpm
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