Hi Victoria, Many thanks for the review. All the nits are now fixed in https://tinyurl.com/vpn-common-latest. Will further think about your point related to Section 3. Cheers, Med > -----Message d'origine----- > De : Victoria Pritchard via Datatracker [mailto:noreply@xxxxxxxx] > Envoyé : mardi 24 août 2021 12:32 > À : rtg-dir@xxxxxxxx > Cc : draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common.all@xxxxxxxx; last-call@xxxxxxxx; > opsawg@xxxxxxxx > Objet : Rtgdir last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-09 > > Reviewer: Victoria Pritchard > Review result: Has Nits > > Hello, > > I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this > draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or > routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG > review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review > is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. > For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see > http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir > > Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-09 > Reviewer: Victoria Pritchard > Review Date: 24th August 2021 > Intended Status: Standards Track > > Summary: > This document is basically ready for publication but has nits that > should be considered prior to publication. > > Comments: > This is a concise document, indicating clearly where it fits, what > it defines, and how it should be used. Seems a good idea to have the > common things in a re-usable module. > > Major Issues: > No major issues found. > > Minor issues: > No minor issues found. > > Nits: > In Section 3, I think it might be easier to read if each grouping > was shown individually with the accompanying explanation next to the > diagram. In Section 4, I noticed some typos: In the inbound-bw > feature, defines -> defined "identity igmpv3" description states > IGMPv2 adminisitrative -> administrative (seen in a few places) > "list forwarding-profile-identifier": Forwrding -> Forwarding > > _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. Merci. This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged information that may be protected by law; they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete this message and its attachments. As emails may be altered, Orange is not liable for messages that have been modified, changed or falsified. Thank you. -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
