Christer, thanks for your review. Balázs, thanks for your response. I entered a No Objection ballot. Alissa > On Oct 1, 2020, at 8:51 AM, Balázs Varga A <balazs.a.varga=40ericsson.com@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Hi Christer, > > Thanks for the review. I agree with all your comments and will be corrected in next version. In detail: > Q1, Yes, RFC 7510 statement does apply to this document. Statement will be added to the introduction section. > DetNet documents focus on solutions for networks that are under a single administrative control or within a > closed group of administrative control. > Q2, OK, second paragraph will be moved to the end of the introduction section as proposed. > Q3, OK, Terminology will be aligned with RFC 7510 (i.e., MPLS-in-UDP). > > Cheers > Bala'zs > > -----Original Message----- > From: Christer Holmberg via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> > Sent: Tuesday, September 1, 2020 10:48 PM > To: gen-art@xxxxxxxx > Cc: last-call@xxxxxxxx; detnet@xxxxxxxx; draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip.all@xxxxxxxx > Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06 > > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review result: Almost Ready > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06 > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review Date: 2020-09-01 > IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-10 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: In general I think the document is almost ready for publication, but I have a few minor issues and nits that I would like the authors to address. > > Major issues: N/A > > Minor issues: > > Q1: In the last paragraph of Section 4, there is a statement from RFC 7510 aboout MPLS-in-UDP not being allowed on the general Internet etc. I think it should be explicitly indicated whether that also applies to this document. The document talks about "IP networks", but it is unclear what the scope really is. > And, if the RFC 7510 statement does apply to this document, I think it shall be stated much earlier: either in the Introduction, or in a dedicated Applicability Section. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Q2: In the Introduction, I like to have the this-document-does-this-and-that text at the end. If possible, please consider moving the 2nd paragraph to the end of the Section. > > Q3: The first sentence of Section 3 says: > > "This document builds on the specification of MPLS over UDP defined in > [RFC7510]." > > ...and Section 4 says "MPLS over UDP/IP encapsulation". > > RFC 7510 talks about MPLS-in-UDP, so please align the terminology. > > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
