Hi Paul,
Thank you for your answers and for addressing my concerns. The revised version with the changes that you proposed is Ready from a Gen-ART review point of view.
Regards,
Dan
On Wed, Sep 9, 2020 at 8:44 AM Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong <jaehoon.paul@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
Hi Dan,I have addressed your comments in the revision:Please see my answers below.On Thu, Sep 3, 2020 at 6:22 PM Dan Romascanu via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote:Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review result: Ready with Issues
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Document: draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-09
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2020-09-03
IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-08
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
Summary:
Ready with Issues
This document defines a YANG data model for the capabilities of various NSFs in
the I2NSF framework to centrally manage the capabilities of the various NSFs.
This is a very clear and well written document, and the use cases and the
examples also help its readability. The document was already reviewed and found
READY for publication by the YANG Doctors, so I did not perform a detailed YANG
review but rather focused on the Gen-ART specific aspects. A couple of issues
should be discussed and clarified before approval.
Major issues:
Minor issues:
1. In the introduction:
> This YANG data model is based on the
information model for I2NSF NSF capabilities
[I-D.ietf-i2nsf-capability].
So, the YANG data model is based on [I-D.ietf-i2nsf-capability], and the YANG
module references [draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-03] and
[I-D.ietf-i2nsf-sdn-ipsec-flow-protection]. However, these three documents are
listed as Informative References. Without them the document cannot be
understood and implemented, so I believe that these reference should be moved
to Normative References.
=> I move the three drafts to the Normative References.2. In the YANG module a few condition capabilities have no REFERENCEs. Where
can the semantics be found?
context-capability
acl-number
application
target
user
group
geography
=> I put the references for the above condition capabilities.Nits/editorial comments:
1. Some of the acronyms are not expanded at first occurrence (VoIP, VoLTE,
DDoS, etc. )=> I mentioned the full words for the acronyms above and IPS.Thanks.Best Regards,Paul--===========================
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