Hi Dan,
Thanks for your review on this draft as a general area review.
I will address your comments this week.
Thanks.
Best Regards,
Paul
On Thu, Sep 3, 2020 at 6:22 PM Dan Romascanu via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote:
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review result: Ready with Issues
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Document: draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-09
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2020-09-03
IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-08
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
Summary:
Ready with Issues
This document defines a YANG data model for the capabilities of various NSFs in
the I2NSF framework to centrally manage the capabilities of the various NSFs.
This is a very clear and well written document, and the use cases and the
examples also help its readability. The document was already reviewed and found
READY for publication by the YANG Doctors, so I did not perform a detailed YANG
review but rather focused on the Gen-ART specific aspects. A couple of issues
should be discussed and clarified before approval.
Major issues:
Minor issues:
1. In the introduction:
> This YANG data model is based on the
information model for I2NSF NSF capabilities
[I-D.ietf-i2nsf-capability].
So, the YANG data model is based on [I-D.ietf-i2nsf-capability], and the YANG
module references [draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-03] and
[I-D.ietf-i2nsf-sdn-ipsec-flow-protection]. However, these three documents are
listed as Informative References. Without them the document cannot be
understood and implemented, so I believe that these reference should be moved
to Normative References.
2. In the YANG module a few condition capabilities have no REFERENCEs. Where
can the semantics be found?
context-capability
acl-number
application
target
user
group
geography
Nits/editorial comments:
1. Some of the acronyms are not expanded at first occurrence (VoIP, VoLTE,
DDoS, etc. )
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Mr. Jaehoon (Paul) Jeong, Ph.D.
Associate Professor
Department of Computer Science and Engineering
Sungkyunkwan University
Office: +82-31-299-4957
Email: jaehoon.paul@xxxxxxxxx, pauljeong@xxxxxxxx
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Mr. Jaehoon (Paul) Jeong, Ph.D.
Associate Professor
Department of Computer Science and Engineering
Sungkyunkwan University
Office: +82-31-299-4957
Email: jaehoon.paul@xxxxxxxxx, pauljeong@xxxxxxxx
Personal Homepage: http://iotlab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php
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