Reviewer: Derek Atkins
Review result: Has Nits
Hi,
I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's
ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the
IESG. These comments were written with the intent of improving
security requirements and considerations in IETF drafts. Comments
not addressed in last call may be included in AD reviews during the
IESG review. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these
comments just like any other last call comments.
Summary:
* With Nits
Details:
* NB: I did not review the Yang Models or Appendices
* Awkward sentence in section 8, top of page 21:
Moreover, the startup configuration
datastore MUST be also pre-configured with the required ALLOW
policies that allow to communicate the NSF with the I2NSF Controller
once the NSF is deployed.
Specifically "that allow to communicate the NSF with ..." should be
changed, possibly to read "that allow the NSF to communicate with ..."
* at the end of 8.3 at the bottom of page 23 there is a space for "the
subtrees and data nodes and their sensitivity/vulnerability:" but
there is no list, it just goes onto the next paragraph at the top of
the next page.
-derek
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