Hi, I have created a new version (-22) of the draft, based on Brian's comment. Murray, as the submission window is currently closed, are you able to manually submit the new version if I send you the files? Regards, Christer -----Original Message----- From: Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@xxxxxxxxx> Sent: maanantai 13. heinäkuuta 2020 23.52 To: Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@xxxxxxxxxxxx>; gen-art@xxxxxxxx Cc: draft-ietf-mmusic-msrp-usage-data-channel.all@xxxxxxxx; last-call@xxxxxxxx; mmusic@xxxxxxxx Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mmusic-msrp-usage-data-channel-21 Thanks Christer, that all looks good to me, Regards Brian On 13-Jul-20 20:58, Christer Holmberg wrote: > Hi Brian, > > Thank You for the review! Please see inline. > > > Nits: > ----- > >>> 4.1. MSRP URI >>> .... >>> transport /= "dc" >>> >>> I see that RFC7977 takes a slightly different approach to updating the ABNF: >>> >>> transport = "tcp" / "ws" / 1*ALPHANUM >>> >> The advantage of listing out >> >> transport = "tcp" / "ws" / "dc" / 1*ALPHANUM >> >> would be that the reader sees the full list. > > The MMUSIC WG has previously decided to take the approach of only writing the new value, using the "/=" format. > > --- > >>> ; Add "dc" to existing transports per [RFC4975] >>> >>> I suggest >>> >>> ; Add "dc" to existing transports per Section 9 of [RFC4975] > > Will modify as suggested. > > --- > >>> 4.6. Session Closing >>> >>> The SDP answerer must ensure that no dcmap or dcsa attributes are >>> present in the SDP answer if no corresponding attributes are present >>> in the received SDP offer. >>> >>> Should that be MUST? > > The reason for "must" is that is referring to generic data channel SDP O/A procedures. > > I suggest to remove the paragraph. > > --- > >>> B2BUA >>> >>> Define the acronym please. > > We normally don't do that in MMUSIC specifications. Also, it is on the IETF list of well-known acronyms. > > Having said that, I am fine to enhance it on first occurrence: 'Back-to-Back User Agent (B2BUA)' > > --- > >>> 9.2. Subprotocol Identifier MSRP >>> >>> A reference to this document is added to the subprotocol identifier >>> "msrp" in the "WebSocket Subprotocol Name Registry" >>> >>> s/this document/RFCXXXX/ > > Will modify as suggested. > > --- > >>> 11. CHANGE LOG >>> >>> Mark this section for deletion by the RFC Editor > > I think the RFC Editor will delete it by default, but we can add explicit text. > > Regards, > > Christer > -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
