Re: [Last-Call] [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mmusic-msrp-usage-data-channel-21

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Hi Brian,

Thank You for the review! Please see inline.


Nits:
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>> 4.1.  MSRP URI
>> ....
>>     transport  /= "dc"
>>
>> I see that RFC7977 takes a slightly different approach to updating the ABNF:
>>
>>     transport  =  "tcp" / "ws" / 1*ALPHANUM
>>
> The advantage of listing out
>
>  transport  =  "tcp" / "ws" / "dc" / 1*ALPHANUM
>
> would be that the reader sees the full list.

The MMUSIC WG has previously decided to take the approach of only writing the new value, using the "/=" format.

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>>                  ; Add "dc" to existing transports per [RFC4975]
>>
>>I suggest
>>
>>                 ; Add "dc" to existing transports per Section 9 of [RFC4975]

Will modify as suggested.

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>>4.6.  Session Closing
>>
>>   The SDP answerer must ensure that no dcmap or dcsa attributes are
>>   present in the SDP answer if no corresponding attributes are present
>>   in the received SDP offer.
>>
>> Should that be MUST?

The reason for "must" is that is referring to generic data channel SDP O/A procedures.

I suggest to remove the paragraph.

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>> B2BUA
>>
>> Define the acronym please.

We normally don't do that in MMUSIC specifications. Also, it is on the IETF list of well-known acronyms.

Having said that, I am fine to enhance it on first occurrence: 'Back-to-Back User Agent (B2BUA)'

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>> 9.2.  Subprotocol Identifier MSRP
>>
>>   A reference to this document is added to the subprotocol identifier
>>   "msrp" in the "WebSocket Subprotocol Name Registry"
>>
>> s/this document/RFCXXXX/

Will modify as suggested.

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>> 11.  CHANGE LOG
>>
>> Mark this section for deletion by the RFC Editor

I think the RFC Editor will delete it by default, but we can add explicit text.

Regards,

Christer

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