Dear Sally, Thanks a lot for your feedback. We shall do the suggested changes. Thanks once again. Regards Arjuna > -----Original Message----- > From: Sally Floyd [mailto:sallyfloyd@xxxxxxx] > Sent: 23 March 2009 01:33 > To: Gorry Fairhurst; Arjuna Sathiaseelan; dccp group > Subject: feedback on draft-ietf-dccp-quickstart-02.txt > > Gorry and Arjuna - > > This looks fine to me. > > One sentence needs to be corrected: > > Section 2.4 says the following: > "Reception of a Quick-Start Response packet results in the sender > entering the Quick-Start Mode." > > I think this needs to be rephrased. Later text gives conditions > when the reception of a Quick-Start Response packet doesn't result > in the sender entering the Quick-Start Mode. E.g., when "the > approved Quick-Start rate is less than current sending rate". > > The rest of my feedback below is all nits and typos and such. > > - Sally > http://www.icir.org/floyd/ > > > NIts and typos: > > Introduction, next to last paragraph: > "Rate-based protocols (e.g. TFRC [RFC5348], CCID-3 > [RFC4342]) have a different feedback mechanism compared to TCP, > where feedback may be sent less frequently (e.g. once per RTT)." > -> > "Rate-based protocols (e.g. TFRC [RFC5348], CCID-3 > [RFC4342]) have a different feedback mechanism than that of TCP. > With rate-based protocols, > feedback may be sent less frequently (e.g. once per RTT)." > > Introduction: > "implement different mechanism" -> "implement a different mechanism" > > Section 2.3: > Could you swap the last two paragraphs? > > Secton 2.3, next to last paragraph: > "Request, therefore" -> "Request therefore" > > Section 2.5, first paragraph: > "period, during" -> "period during" > > Section 2.5, second paragraph: > "when sender" -> "when the sender" > > Section 2.5, Figure 2: > It might be more clear to have this for Quick-Start Mode: > > +----------------------------------------------+ > | Quick-Start Packets --> | > | <-- Feedback A from Receiver | > | (first feedback of a QS Packet) | > | Quick-Start Packets --> | > | <-- Feedback B from Receiver | > | (feedback of all QS Packets) | > | Receipt of Feedback A > +----------------------------------------------+ > > And then the Quick-Start Validation Phase could end with > "Receipt of Feedback B". > > Section 2.5, last paragraph: > "congestion, stops" -> "congestion stops" > > Section 2.7, next to last paragraph: > "effects multiple connections" -> "affects multiple connections" > > The sections go 2.8, then 2.8, then 2.10. > > Section 2.10, last paragraph: > "connnection, and" -> "connnection and" > > Section 3.2: > "CCID-3, leads" -> "CCID-3 leads" > > Section 3.2.4, third paragraph: > "congestion, stops" -> "congestion stops" > > Section 3.3.1: > "packet per second" -> "packets per second" > > Section 4.2, second paragraph: > "link or network-layer paths" -> "links or network-layer paths"
